Lyra Heartstrings Dialogue (1 Viewer)

[enragedostrich]

Hey all! I'm looking for some feedback on a dialogue I wrote for Lyra Heartstrings becoming a human. I might change it depending on how people respond, so constructive criticism is appreciated. (On the internet? No way!)

 

[The Hacker Known As Snow]

Nice first dialogue. I love the use of ahegao! "Oh Celestia" got me xD

 

[enragedostrich]

Nice first dialogue. I love the use of ahegao! "Oh Celestia" got me xD

Thanks, I tried to make it as fleshed out as possible to make a good first impression. :P

 

[Seymour]

I love this. An excellent job.