Molesting dialogue request (1 Viewer)

[Faron]

I`m wondering if some one will take a request of making incest rape-ish kind a dialogue.
The main idea is - dad abusing his daughter(as variant "punishing" her for something), she is pleading for it to stop, but submissive as she is helpless.

-"Daddy! It hurts! Please, I'll be good. I promise!"

... and shit like that.


so, anyone? :) ???

 

[Michaelitin]

Here you go, It's not perfect but It's pretty good, tell me if there are any issues with it :)
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[Pim_gd]

Looked it over - fixed some typo's.

Also, this line is awesome.
wake:"Ugh.. I had the weirdest dream that I-[SHOCK]"

Maybe it needs some more thought lines...
Also, the only mood change you have going on in there is to angry mood, and whilst that's understandable, it also means she'll be angry the whole time (don't know whether that's the effect you're going for).
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[Michaelitin]

Looked it over - fixed some typo's.

Also, this line is awesome.
wake:"Ugh.. I had the weirdest dream that I-[SHOCK]"

Maybe it needs some more thought lines...
Also, the only mood change you have going on in there is to angry mood, and whilst that's understandable, it also means she'll be angry the whole time (don't know whether that's the effect you're going for).
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thanks for fixing some of the issues, this was actually my first dialogue that I worked on

 

[Faron]

Michaelitin thanks for your effort man, but thats not what I meant - she shouldn`t be "answering back" in "brat"-ish manner, or threat in any way, I meant her to be more helpless, scared, submissive begging, pleading etc. (read my 1st message).
Cause there are pleanty of dialogues with similar plot with 2 variants - shes a brat-ish, or shes eager to please, so...

 

[Michaelitin]

oh I see what you mean, I really couldn't understand what you meant by submissive but I tried my best to it haha

 

[rubix]

For the interested parties, I finished off something like this today, posted it here

http://www.sdtmods.com/index.php?topic=1931.msg21095#msg21095

I have ripped the one line that was (and I quote) "awesome" in Michaelitin's dialogue, other than that all fresh
take a look, drop any feedback on my thread

 

[rekT666]

very good I must say