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Ye olde Dialogue-e

Discussion in 'Dialogue' started by Blargh, Dec 22, 2011.

  1. Blargh

    Blargh Potential Patron

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    I know one thing: A porn dialogue writer I am not.

    However I like playing around with stuff I can mod so here's the fruit of my labour. It's a generic Shakespearean dialogue that's applicable to anything you want to ham up to eleven ;) I could see it being used for anything from a fair medieval maiden to a devious succubus or maybe an actress.

    I welcome any and all feedback, especially constructive criticism.

    EDIT: I have uploaded a new version. It has two or three new lines, less grammar and spelling mistakes and a little more animation.
     

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  2. hypocrite

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    Amusing, if not very exciting. :P
     
  3. booster

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    well I wouldn't be able to wank to this but it's frikkin funny :D

    especially the ending :)
     
  4. AaRL

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    Cute. a medevil maiden or a damsel in distress
     
  5. RajasGrime

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    This dialogue is 400 years overdue.

    Thine feels more natural than thy to me, otherwise I love it.
     
  6. Blargh

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    Thanks ;)
    I actually tried to stay true to the actual grammar, meaning that "thine" is used before a vowel or an h. Any other case it's "thine".
     
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    Sounds like something overheard at a local Ren-Faire, or somewhere at Pennsic ;)
    (Kudos to any who get the reference)

    Well played, good sir! Goes well with the various Gothic backgrounds, or various Fantasy character sets (Zelda, etc).
     
  8. Final

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    Yeah, it actually follows rules still in use today (“a”/“an”). I suspect our non-English origins to be the reason why “thine” sounds more natural to you (and me): It’s closer to the German “dein” and, as I presume, its Dutch equivalent.

    Nice dialogue.
     
  9. RajasGrime

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    Our equivalent sounds nothing like "thine" or "dein" ("jouw"), but you may be right about the "dein" part.
     
  10. Final

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    Oh, I didn’t know that. Well, as said, I can totally comprehend Germans prefering “thine”.
     
  11. Blargh

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    I have uploaded a new version with more lines, more animation and less mistakes ;)
     
  12. Gennydimaro

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    That's Hilarious.
     
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    Fixed dialogue via DialogueChecker.
    Issues resolved(1):
    An uneven amount of double quotes was found on line 45. This could indicate a coding error.

    Line 45: held:"[ANGRY_MOOD]Thou playest most fouly!
     

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