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poke trainer

Discussion in 'Dialogue' started by warhawk47, Oct 30, 2011.

  1. warhawk47

    warhawk47 Potential Patron

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    My take on a pokemon trainer dialogue.
    Not a "human battle" like the other poke trainer dialogue.
    Backstory is this: You taunted her into betting one of her pokemon against yours in a battle. You win. Instead of giving it up she begs and pleads with you to reconsider. So you settle for a more... beneficial approach.

    I'd like to include more poke puns but at the same time i didn't want it to sound quite as silly as the other poke trainer dialogue. I want it to sound realistic (for a pokemon game).
    Any suggestions are welcome.
     

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  2. DevilJinKazama

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    I read through the dialogue and fixed some grammar and spelling issues I came across.

    Didn't alter the dialogue in any way that's ~too~ noticable.[attachurl=1]
     

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  3. warhawk47

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    Grammar you say? O.o ill have to have a look. Thanks.
    All i saw was that you switched the interrupts and coughing triggers to a neater format. They were directly transferred from the original dialogue so this was pointless.
    If there's anything else then let me know.
     
  4. DevilJinKazama

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    I was mostly some aesthetic changes.
    Things like "Believe" instead of "beleive", "friend" instead of "freind", and "done soon" instead of "soon done".

    And I rearranged the interrupts and coughs into a neater format.

    Like I said, I didn't change it too much, just fixed some things that I came across that needed a li'l fixin'.
     
  5. Wathayus

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    The Text is Impressive Good Work.

    Please Post a Text Between Trainer and Pokemon.

    Realy good work and Thx ^^
     
  6. warhawk47

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    You mean like face fucking a pokemon?
    JUst worried that would sound a lot like "Pika"