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request, girl who hates sucking cock

Discussion in 'Dialogue' started by hammoon1, Aug 18, 2013.

  1. hammoon1

    hammoon1 Potential Patron

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    a girl who hates sucking cock.
    examples:
    get that away from me!
    eww thats gross.
    just cum.....
    please no not again!
    etc..........
    any takers?
     
  2. Snuffalupagus

    Snuffalupagus Potential Patron

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    First time making a dialogue. Hope this is kinda what your looking for. ;D Lemme know what you think.



    MODIFIED


    DOWNLOAD PIM-GD's LINK This one is broken!!!
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  3. Pim_gd

    Pim_gd Swell Supporter

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    Looked Snuffleupagus's dialogue over and fixed the issues the checker reported.
    Issues:
    Code:
    Dialogue was checked in 20 ms.
    I found 4 issue(s) with your dialogue, of which 0 were severe.
    Grammatical error (double sentence ending: .!) on line 21, col 19 near "resistance:"W-wait..! (...)"
    Line 21: resistance:"W-wait..! You stretching my throat to much! IT HURTS!!!"
    
    Grammatical error (double sentence ending: .?) on line 46, col 51 near "(...) do..?""
    Line 46: general:"How much more are you going to make me do..?"
    
    Line 55 is unused!
    Line 55: Wake:"You are unbelievable... I just simply cant believe you'd do this even after I passed out..."
    
    Grammatical error (double sentence ending: .?) on line 98, col 37 near "(...) I..?""
    Line 98: wake:"I feel so dizzy. Wh-where am I..?"
    
    Once you've fixed these issues, try letting me look your dialogue over again. Maybe I'll find something new.
    
    EDIT: Forgot to upload dialogue, and noticed a strange mistake in the output which tells me I broke something again.
    A reference is made to an undeclared variable (Gasp) on line 80.
    To fix this, add the variable to the initial_settings line of your dialogue.
    Line 80: held:"*Gasp* are you trying to choke me to death!"

    A reference is made to an undeclared variable (Gasps) on line 97.
    To fix this, add the variable to the initial_settings line of your dialogue.
    Line 97: wake:"*Gasps* ... What ... happened? "

    A reference is made to an undeclared variable (gasps) on line 98.
    To fix this, add the variable to the initial_settings line of your dialogue.
    Line 98: wake:"*gasps* YOU.... M-made me pass out! What the hell!"

    A reference is made to an undeclared variable (gulpshard) on line 105.
    To fix this, add the variable to the initial_settings line of your dialogue.
    Line 105: swallow:"*gulpshard* No more... Never again."

    A reference is made to an undeclared variable (wretchs stomach) on line 118.
    To fix this, add the variable to the initial_settings line of your dialogue.
    Line 118: cum_in_mouth:"Oh... my.... *wretchs stomach*... God.... you came in my mouth!"

    A reference is made to an undeclared variable (Hack) on line 131.
    To fix this, add the variable to the initial_settings line of your dialogue.
    Line 131: cum_in_throat:"*Hack* *Cough* Oh god, that's disgusting... "

    A reference is made to an undeclared variable (Cough) on line 131.
    To fix this, add the variable to the initial_settings line of your dialogue.
    Line 131: cum_in_throat:"*Hack* *Cough* Oh god, that's disgusting... "

    A reference is made to an undeclared variable (cough) on line 144.
    To fix this, add the variable to the initial_settings line of your dialogue.
    Line 144: cough:"*cough*"
     

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  4. hammoon1

    hammoon1 Potential Patron

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    AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
     
  5. Snuffalupagus

    Snuffalupagus Potential Patron

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    @Pim_Gd- Thanks for fixing that. I honestly do not know much about all this yet. I just kinda went for it. Thanks for fixing the errors. I am definitely about to go check out the fixed version. When I write more dialogues If you dont care Ill run them by you, if thats ok.

    @Campfire- I hope you enjoy it bro.



    "Just ran the fixed version and I felt it actually turned out quite well."