request, girl who hates sucking cock (1 Viewer)

hammoon1

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May 12, 2013
a girl who hates sucking cock.
examples:
get that away from me!
eww thats gross.
just cum.....
please no not again!
etc..........
any takers?
 

Snuffalupagus

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Aug 14, 2013
First time making a dialogue. Hope this is kinda what your looking for. ;D Lemme know what you think.



MODIFIED


DOWNLOAD PIM-GD's LINK This one is broken!!!
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Pim_gd

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Jan 25, 2013
Looked Snuffleupagus's dialogue over and fixed the issues the checker reported.
Issues:
Code:
Dialogue was checked in 20 ms.
I found 4 issue(s) with your dialogue, of which 0 were severe.
Grammatical error (double sentence ending: .!) on line 21, col 19 near "resistance:"W-wait..! (...)"
Line 21: resistance:"W-wait..! You stretching my throat to much! IT HURTS!!!"

Grammatical error (double sentence ending: .?) on line 46, col 51 near "(...) do..?""
Line 46: general:"How much more are you going to make me do..?"

Line 55 is unused!
Line 55: Wake:"You are unbelievable... I just simply cant believe you'd do this even after I passed out..."

Grammatical error (double sentence ending: .?) on line 98, col 37 near "(...) I..?""
Line 98: wake:"I feel so dizzy. Wh-where am I..?"

Once you've fixed these issues, try letting me look your dialogue over again. Maybe I'll find something new.

EDIT: Forgot to upload dialogue, and noticed a strange mistake in the output which tells me I broke something again.
A reference is made to an undeclared variable (Gasp) on line 80.
To fix this, add the variable to the initial_settings line of your dialogue.
Line 80: held:"*Gasp* are you trying to choke me to death!"

A reference is made to an undeclared variable (Gasps) on line 97.
To fix this, add the variable to the initial_settings line of your dialogue.
Line 97: wake:"*Gasps* ... What ... happened? "

A reference is made to an undeclared variable (gasps) on line 98.
To fix this, add the variable to the initial_settings line of your dialogue.
Line 98: wake:"*gasps* YOU.... M-made me pass out! What the hell!"

A reference is made to an undeclared variable (gulpshard) on line 105.
To fix this, add the variable to the initial_settings line of your dialogue.
Line 105: swallow:"*gulpshard* No more... Never again."

A reference is made to an undeclared variable (wretchs stomach) on line 118.
To fix this, add the variable to the initial_settings line of your dialogue.
Line 118: cum_in_mouth:"Oh... my.... *wretchs stomach*... God.... you came in my mouth!"

A reference is made to an undeclared variable (Hack) on line 131.
To fix this, add the variable to the initial_settings line of your dialogue.
Line 131: cum_in_throat:"*Hack* *Cough* Oh god, that's disgusting... "

A reference is made to an undeclared variable (Cough) on line 131.
To fix this, add the variable to the initial_settings line of your dialogue.
Line 131: cum_in_throat:"*Hack* *Cough* Oh god, that's disgusting... "

A reference is made to an undeclared variable (cough) on line 144.
To fix this, add the variable to the initial_settings line of your dialogue.
Line 144: cough:"*cough*"
 

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Snuffalupagus

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Aug 14, 2013
@Pim_Gd- Thanks for fixing that. I honestly do not know much about all this yet. I just kinda went for it. Thanks for fixing the errors. I am definitely about to go check out the fixed version. When I write more dialogues If you dont care Ill run them by you, if thats ok.

@Campfire- I hope you enjoy it bro.



"Just ran the fixed version and I felt it actually turned out quite well."
 

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