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Discussion in 'Dialogue' started by srotu, May 4, 2012.

  1. srotu

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    ok this is my 1st try at this i do wish there was a way when she is given a order she follows it like if he says take your top off or bottom she says yes sir and does. is there a way to do that? you can change her name to what ever or who ever you want her to be
     

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  2. srotu

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    ok for anyone who has looked at it downloaded it and used it. what can i do to improve it? thanks for any feedback good or bad
     
  3. CaveCarson

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    I really like the idea here, but it did need a lot of grammar work. I fixed the grammar issues here and reposted it for you. Also fixed a few of the places where you typed *YOU* incorrectly. Also changed the "Sandra" to *ME*. This makes it so the game will insert the name of whatever character you are using.

    I really like the dialogue. Great work!
     

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  4. thetitanmonster

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    not bad at all but i tad bit to racist at points
     
  5. srotu

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    well if it was i wrote it right it was about a black guy face fucking a young white girl in a nasty way