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My dialouge corner (UPDATE- New Versions of Trudy and Hinata dialouges)

Discussion in 'Dialogue' started by PenKnight, Jun 12, 2012.

  1. PenKnight

    PenKnight Swell Supporter

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    So, I decided to take a stab myself at doing one of these custom dialouges. What better way to try than with Hinata, one of my favorite characters.

    The scenario for this dialouge: Hinata is enjoying her first time with Naruto on their wedding night after he has become the Hokage.

    Well, here's the dialouge (and some sample pics) Feel free to criticize and point out anything that needs work.


    UPDATE!!


    I went back and made a few changes to the original dialouge. Aside from spelling changes, I also added the handjob dialouge too. And below, you'll also see a new Trudy dialouge too.
     

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  2. AaRL

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    Re: Hinata- Wedding night

    Not bad for your first time, but I have a few tips for you.

    -Try inlcuding some thought lines or him talking. You think he would have more to say being its their wedding night.
    -Also, you have no mood triggers or reactions what so ever. Try including those for a more flowing dialogue
    -In the end, instead of having
    DEFAULT:
    resistance:"CLEAR"
    interrupt:"CLEAR"
    and so on...

    Just put...

    DEFAULT:
    all:"CLEAR"

    Same thing, just that much less to type or copy/paste.

    Im not bashing your style, just trying to help you out. Hope you take it as such.
     
  3. PenKnight

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    Re: Hinata- Wedding night

    Thanks for that. I may be able to do a revision of it later.

    BTW, do I uhave to manually enter the dialouge for the guy on Notepad, or can I use SDT to do it?
     
  4. AaRL

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    Re: Hinata- Wedding night

    The current SDT game has an in game editor. Its right where you load the dialogue in game. I shy away from it because a random crash from your picture viewer. (Broswer, ifranview or whatever could crash easily) I tend to stick with Notepad and jsut type them out myself. Notepad is more stable anyway for my needs when writing dialogues.
     
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    Re: Hinata- Wedding night

    Ok, for anyone who downloaded the dialouge, I've updated it, per AaRl's suggestions, so see how you like the new one.
     
  6. AaRL

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    Re: Hinata- Wedding night

    Glad to see you added triggers and moods. Much better feel to it. Also, are you trying progressive dialogue in the intro?

    intro:"I've waited for this moment for so long, Naruto-kun."
    intro2:"Hinata-chan..."{"style":"Him"}

    I couldnt get intro2 line to play. Might want to correct it like this. Either drop the "2" and leave them as intro lines or type it out like this:

    intro:"I've waited for this moment for so long, Naruto-kun.[intro2]"
    intro2:"Hinata-chan..."{"style":"Him"}

    Without text it would look like this:

    intro:"....[intro1]"
    intro1:"....[intro2]"
    intro2:"....[intro3]"

    Where the dots are replaced by text. Works on many triggers, but not all of them. Just change intro to whatever trigger you want to progress. Just an idea.

    That way when you use the dialogue, it will always open with those two lines. If you dont use progressive dialogue, then the game will randomly choose one of the two intro lines to play.

    Try reading of the guide made by EO.

    http://superdeepthroat.ryonani.com/index.php?topic=1640.0

    It helped me a lot in making dialogues.
     
  7. PenKnight

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    Re: Hinata- Wedding night

    Thanks, that's something I need to remember!

    EDIT: Ok, the small changes was made.
     
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    Re: Hinata- Wedding night (Version 3)

    Well, I decided to try and see if I could create a new dialouge.

    Today, it is Trudy (from Scooby Doo! Camp Scare)

    The scenario of the dialouge: Trudy and Luke sneak off to have themselves a bit of fun after some 'training' from Velma.

    UPDAE: A new version of this dialouge is now available, with a few added lines for the handjob mode!
     

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    Re: My dialouge corner (UPDATE- Road To Ninja Hinata)

    WOW. Has it been that long since I updated this one?

    SO I got bored today and noticed no one tried anything for the Road to Ninja version of Hinata Hyuga, a girl who, most assurdly, will not take no for an answer. I tweaked my previous Hinata dialouge a bit and, well, here ya go.

    ALSO INCLUDED: A free character code!!

    Code:
    charName:Hinata Hyuga;mood:Happy;bodyScale:1.0225;arms:onlegs,onlegs;throatResist:0;hair:asuka,1,1,1;iris:solid,0,0,0,0.153;breasts:124;skin:light;nose:normal;ear:normal;lipstick:0,197,64,109,1;eyeshadow:55,26,99,1;sclera:255,255,255,1;blush:196,80,77,0.35;freckles:60,24,24,0.8,0;mascara:0,0,0,1,100;nailpolish:0,0,0,0;eyebrow:normal,89,67,51,1,0,0,0,1;hairhsl:0,1,1,1;skinhsl:0,1,1,1;hisskinhsl:0,1,1,1;bg:4;hisBody:male;hisPenis:1,1.2,1.2;balls:1,1.3;hisSkin:0;hisTop:none,255,255,255,1;hisBottoms:none,0,26,68,1;hisFootwear:none,0,26,56,1;collar:none,0,0,0,1,0,0,0,1;cuffs:none,0,0,0,1,0,0,0,1;gag:none,0,0,0,1;panties:thong,63,118,162,1;top:bra,128,128,128,1;armwear:none,0,0,0,1;bottoms:boyshorts,63,118,162,1,0,0,0,1;legwear:none,0,0,0,1,255,126,167,0.431;legwearB:kneehigh,0,0,0,1,0,0,0,1;footwear:school,0,0,0,1,0,0,0,1;eyewear:none,0,0,0,1;headwear:none,0,0,0,1,0,0,0,1;tonguePiercing:none,183,187,195,1;herTan:none,0;customHair:H:\sdt\Naruto\Hinata.png



    UPDATE: With help from a fellow forum member, Pim_gd, I fixed up the dialouge so it should be much improved from the original!
     

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  10. PenKnight

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    Ok, dialouges updated. Now to brainstorm on a new girl...