MILF SUCKING VIRGIN (1 Viewer)

Moocher

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Trust me it's perfect. Hope you love just like I do. ;D
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Redid it for ya! This time it should be fine.
 

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Queen of Clubs

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If your going to get cocky and say "Trust me, its perfect" then you could at least proof read it ;) there are some minor errors.

For example you wrote "Maid" instead of "Made" and also you have written * YOU* instead of *YOU* I'm not sure if the extra gap will affect it or not (I haven't play tested it) but I'm guessing it will.

All in all though, its pretty good, just needs a few tweaks :-\
 

Juicetour

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Queen of Clubs said:
If your going to get cocky and say "Trust me, its perfect" then you could at least proof read it ;) there are some minor errors.

For example you wrote "Maid" instead of "Made" and also you have written * YOU* instead of *YOU* I'm not sure if the extra gap will affect it or not (I haven't play tested it) but I'm guessing it will.

All in all though, its pretty good, just needs a few tweaks :-\

Ooooooh! You got told!
 

Kinnerman

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I liked it. Not to mention you can replace "My Husband" with "Your father" if you wanted a Mom Son dialogue. And also theres no need to bash each other guys. Save that for another topic.
 

Queen of Clubs

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I'm not bashing the guy, he did a good job on the dialogue...I just don't like the cockiness of saying "trust me, its perfect"
 

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