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MILF SUCKING VIRGIN

Discussion in 'Dialogue' started by Moocher, Oct 2, 2011.

  1. Moocher

    Moocher Avid Affiliate

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    Trust me it's perfect. Hope you love just like I do. ;D
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    Redid it for ya! This time it should be fine.
     

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  2. fuzzydude64

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    Hey, not bad!
     
  3. Juicetour

    Juicetour Potential Patron

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    Looks great but seems to stop working after the first couple of lines. Coding error?
     
  4. Queen of Clubs

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    If your going to get cocky and say "Trust me, its perfect" then you could at least proof read it ;) there are some minor errors.

    For example you wrote "Maid" instead of "Made" and also you have written * YOU* instead of *YOU* I'm not sure if the extra gap will affect it or not (I haven't play tested it) but I'm guessing it will.

    All in all though, its pretty good, just needs a few tweaks :-\
     
  5. Juicetour

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    Ooooooh! You got told!
     
  6. Kinnerman

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    I liked it. Not to mention you can replace "My Husband" with "Your father" if you wanted a Mom Son dialogue. And also theres no need to bash each other guys. Save that for another topic.
     
  7. Queen of Clubs

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    I'm not bashing the guy, he did a good job on the dialogue...I just don't like the cockiness of saying "trust me, its perfect"
     
  8. Moocher

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    Sorry about that, I'll look it over if I get the chance.