Mike's various dialogues (Updated Feb 19 - threesome and naughty bride) (2 Viewers)

[mike]

Thanks guys and sorry for neglecting this thread. Now that I'm done with costumes I'll likely go back to writing dialogues.

That was hilarious XD
Laughed so hard ^^

;)

 

[mikeryu]

lots of dialogues that are extremely great! keep it up. ;D

 

[TDream]

Dattebane haha

The Naruto x Kushina dialogue is pretty good.

 

[mxn36]

Nice work. Except I think your mean father-in-law/brother-in-law, rather than stepfather/stepbrother. The stepfather/stepbrother relationship would be if her mother was the one getting married to the stepfather.

 

[DTfan]

Yes, father-in-law is the right word here. But once you fix that (a simple search and replace, plus one usage of stepdaughter to become daughter-in-law and one usage of "step-" where she cuts herself off midword, which can be deleted) it's really a great dialogue!