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A catgirl dialog

Discussion in 'Dialogue' started by Robit92, Nov 11, 2012.

  1. Robit92

    Robit92 Potential Patron

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    Hello, First time uploading a dialog of mine. I wrote this up as a happy if slightly ditzy catgirl who only refers to herself in third person. Let me know what you think.
     

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  2. astounded

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    I like the concept and find her referring to herself in the third person sexy.

    You may want to try to add more thought lines or lines from him so that there is some dialgue while her mouth is otherwise engaged.

    Keep it up! I look forward to more.
     
  3. Lizoran

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    Not bad for a first
    I can totally see you doing better
    keep working and you'll get it
     
  4. Adrien

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    A very fun one, and original. More lines plz, and as its said above, more thoughts plz
     
  5. Robit92

    Robit92 Potential Patron

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    Thank you for the feedback. I will continue to work on it.
     
  6. Adrien

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    Hurry up please my sexy catgirl is waiting ;-)
     
  7. Robit92

    Robit92 Potential Patron

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    Added some thoughts for her, and added a few lines for him.
     

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    I like your idea and originality. I'm not really favoring the third person view; maybe some people like it. Keep building on this ;)