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Astounded's Dialogues [Added Punishment]

Discussion in 'Dialogue' started by astounded, Oct 18, 2012.

  1. astounded

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    Warning: Most of my dialogues are rough in terms of scene (and coding). The dialogues are probably best enjoyed by sadists who like seeing into the mind of a masochist.

    Hint: Interact with her. Use the Pull up and Pull down to get her reaction.



    1. Good Girl v2
    Scene: Male and female in what is most certainly an unhealthy relationship. He is sadistic and domineering. She is masochistic and completely dependent on him. In this scene has is a "Good girl" and is simply doing what he wants. As you'll see, what I find sexiest is what goes on in her thoughts. Many thanks to Cyclone, author of "Stockholm Girl" for the inspiration.
    View attachment GoodGirl_V2b.txt


    2. Good Girl Public Washroom
    See "GoodGirl" for a more generic dialog of the same relationship.
    Scene: In this scene you have taken her out on the town. You feel like a break and so pull her into a public toilet for some quick relief.
    View attachment GoodGirl_Toilet.txt

    Suggested background:
    Silentsky's Imagezilla.net - Adult Image Host, Non-Adult Image Hosting
    Silentsky's http://imagezilla.net/thumbs/4985Public_Washroom_3_tn.png


    3. Bad Girl [Fixes]
    Darker side of the above relationship.
    View attachment BadGirl_IIc.txt

    Suggested background:
    Silentsky's http://imagezilla.net/thumbs/59050Basement_tn.png


    4. Welcome Home
    screenshot0006.png
    A new relationship. You have an excellent new live-in girlfriend. With some help, she has eagerly learned how to welcome you home every day. She likes to share fantasies if you pull her up. She enjoys some playful but rough disciple if you pull her down.

    Code:
    charName:Lauren;mood:Normal;bodyScale:1;arms:onlegs;throatResist:50;hair:jillvalentine,1,1,0,1;iris:bright,70,105,37,1;breasts:49;skin:light;nose:normal;ear:normal;lipstick:0,197,64,109,0.663;eyeshadow:16,58,24,0.718;sclera:255,255,255,1;blush:196,80,77,0.424;freckles:60,24,24,0.8,0;mascara:0,112,0,1,8;nailpolish:0,82,0,0;eyebrow:normal,45,25,16,1,30,19,19,1;hairhsl:0,1,1,1;skinhsl:0,1,1,1;hisskinhsl:0,1,1,1;bg:3;hisSkin:0;hisPenis:1,0.8999999999999999,0.8999999999999999;balls:1,1;hisTop:shirt,0,0,0,1;hisBottoms:slacks,38,38,40,1;hisFootwear:loafers,22,8,0,1;collar:none,0,117,0,1,165,167,167,1;cuffs:none,255,167,188,1,182,132,75,1;gag:none,255,167,188,1;panties:briefs,255,167,188,1;top:bra,255,167,188,1;armwear:none,255,167,188,1;bottoms:jeanshorts,255,167,188,1,255,167,188,1;tops:tank,255,255,255,1;legwear:none,54,0,26,1,182,132,75,1;footwear:none,255,167,188,1,84,0,6,1;eyewear:none,255,167,188,1;headwear:none,255,167,188,1,224,96,140,1;tonguePiercing:none,255,167,188,1;earring:teardrop,0,81,0,1;customBG:BG_Kitchen_white.png
    Suggested background: Undertow
    View attachment Welcome_Home_IIb.txt


    5. Club Sub
    Same relationship as "Welcome Home". Your submissive ex really screwed up and ended up a permanent fixture at the club. Very dark. A bit buggy too. Again, pull her up by her hair or push her down to kneel will change her mood. She seems to enjoy asphyxiation.
    Note: Made for use with a ring-gag.
    View attachment ClubSub_b.txt
    clubsub.png

    Suggested background:
    Undertow


    6. Accepting the Position
    MsKane_1.png
    Part 1 of a trilogy about the transformation of a young lady into something useful around the office. In part one, Girl needs job. Girl gets interview. Girl tries to cheat in interview. Girl _wakes up_ trapped into taking a job with lots of "developmental" commitments.
    View attachment 1 Accepting the position.txt

    Hints: Pull her up. Push her down to kneeling. Choke her out for the story to progress to part 2.

    Suggested name: Ms. Kane (consistent name needed for parts 2 and 3)
    Code:
    charName:Ms Kane;mood:Normal;bodyScale:1.015;arms:onhislegs;throatResist:78;hair:rikku,0,0,0,0,0,0,0,0,1,1,1;iris:bright,70,100,37,1;breasts:42;skin:pale;nose:normal;ear:normal;lipstick:0,255,56,46,0.478;eyeshadow:68,100,38,0.392;sclera:255,255,255,1;blush:196,80,77,0.565;freckles:60,24,24,0.8,11;mascara:0,58,24,0.384,44;nailpolish:255,255,255,1;eyebrow:normal,161,66,30,1,79,40,21,1;hairhsl:0,0.78,0.84,1;skinhsl:0,1.49,1,1.17;hisskinhsl:0,1,1.28,0.78;bg:3;hisBody:male;hisPenis:1,0.93,0.93;balls:1,1;hisSkin:0;hisTop:shirt,238,242,245,1;hisBottoms:slacks,27,29,29,1;hisFootwear:loafers,0,0,0,1;collar:none,84,0,6,1,232,240,255,1;cuffs:none,0,0,0,1,171,177,185,1;gag:none,255,167,188,1;panties:briefs,255,255,255,1;top:bra,255,255,255,1;armwear:none,255,167,188,1;bottoms:jeans,66,66,66,1,84,0,6,1;tops:shirt,255,255,255,1;legwear:none,54,0,26,1,182,132,75,1;legwearB:shortsock,205,205,205,0.8,0,0,0,1;footwear:school,0,0,0,1,0,0,0,1;eyewear:none,255,167,188,1;headwear:none,255,167,188,1,255,255,255,1;tonguePiercing:none,255,167,188,1;bellyPiercing:stud,0,0,0,1;earring:stud,84,0,6,1;herTan:none,0;customBG:BG_Office_Exec.png
    Suggested Background: Undertow



    7. On the Job Training
    Candice_2.png

    Part 2 of a trilogy about the transformation of a young lady into something useful around the office. In part two Girl has been blackmailed into staying on the job and she wants out. They discuss opportunities for further 'development'.
    View attachment 2 On the Job Training.txt

    Hints: Pull her up. Push her down to kneeling.

    Suggested name: Candice (consistent name needed for parts 1 and 3)

    Code:
    charName:Candice;mood:Normal;bodyScale:1.015;arms:onlegs;throatResist:72;hair:rikku,0,0,0,0,0,0,0,0,1,1,1;iris:wide,70,100,37,1;breasts:74;skin:pale;nose:normal;ear:normal;lipstick:0,255,56,46,0.929;eyeshadow:68,100,38,1;sclera:255,255,255,1;blush:196,80,77,0.565;freckles:60,24,24,0.8,11;mascara:0,0,0,1,27;nailpolish:197,64,109,1;eyebrow:normal,161,66,30,1,79,40,21,1;hairhsl:23,1.13,1,1;skinhsl:0,1.49,1,1.17;hisskinhsl:0,1,1.28,0.78;bg:3;hisSkin:0;hisPenis:1,0.93,0.93;balls:1,1;hisTop:shirt,238,242,245,1;hisBottoms:slacks,27,29,29,1;hisFootwear:loafers,0,0,0,1;collar:none,84,0,6,1,232,240,255,1;cuffs:none,0,0,0,1,171,177,185,1;gag:none,255,167,188,1;panties:briefs,0,0,0,1;top:bra,0,0,0,1;armwear:none,255,167,188,1;bottoms:skirt,128,128,128,1,128,128,128,1;tops:shirt,255,255,255,0.937;legwear:kneehigh,88,84,88,1,182,132,75,1;footwear:highheel,0,0,0,1,84,0,6,1;eyewear:none,255,167,188,1;headwear:none,255,167,188,1,255,255,255,1;tonguePiercing:barbell,255,167,188,1;bellyPiercing:ring,0,0,0,1;earring:teardrop,240,150,117,1;customBG:BG_Office_Exec.png
    Suggested Background: Undertow

    Developer notes: I was never able to get finishes to work properly so I just used *restart* events.


    8. Punishment {DRAFT}
    Scene: Girl reports for her punishment for an unstated offense. Man punishes with a throat-fuck.
    Hints: Pull her up and push her down to change the scenario.
    screenshot0001.png
    View attachment Punishment_b.txt




    Let me know of problems as and I'll try to fix them.
    All feedback and karma is very welcome.
     
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  2. evilmoers

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    Re: Astounded's Dialogues

    I prefer the very first one. THX.
     
  3. cwking420

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    Re: Astounded's Dialogues

    Haven't played through it yet(only read txt file) but ClubSub looks like a hit to me.
     
  4. astounded

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    Re: Astounded's Dialogues

    Thanks for the feedback. If you share any reasons why you prefer one over the others it may help improve other dialogues.
     
  5. astounded

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    Re: Astounded's Dialogues

    Added a new one. "Welcome Home". I'll get the background up in the proper place soon.

    I'm amazed at how long these take me to do due to my own inefficiency. I tend to change the plot 1/2 through and that takes a long of rewrite.. . I hope you enjoy them! ;D
     
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    I really enjoy your dialogues man, keep them comming. Oh and don't worry about how long they take. I've been working on the next installment of my New Slave series for almost a month and I'm only about 3/4 of the way through it. Not to mention I have decided to make the one I'm working on part 3 since I came up with a better idea for part 2, so I'll to finish both of them before I post either.
     
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    Nice dialogues.
    A bit tough to go throught the texts, though. Much wall of text without CR but that's easily done in a text editor ^^

    I like the hard stuff and would love to see more. But take Your time. No need to rush a good job :)
     
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    What hair is that you used in the first three and where can I get it.
     
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    Re: Astounded's Dialogues

    In progress:
    I hope to complete a 3 part series: To me the sexy part is her slow transformation across the series.

    1. "Accepting the position" = "Ms. Kane" interviews for job. Thinks she is doing a one time favor and ends up blackmailed into taking the job with extra duties as assigned.
    View attachment 2
     

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    Re: Astounded's Dialogues - Added "Accepting the Position"

    I did a short playthrough of your new dialogue "Accepting the Position" and I notced something. You don't have any restsarts. You have restarts set to trigger finishes, but no finishes dialogue. I wasn't sure if this was intentional or not, so I figured I'd metion it. Also you make it easy to release her but you don't have any way to hold her again without stopping and opening up the option menue. Might I suggest setting all those pulled_down commands with [release] to held=true and writing a new set with held=false that allow you to [hold].
     
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    Re: Astounded's Dialogues [Added P1&2 of Candice Trilogy]

    Added Part 1 and Part 2 of Candice Trilogy: Story of girl who tries to blow her way through a job interview and ends up paying for her decision.

    Player note: Let the short intro play until her head is grabbed. That is your signal to play. Pull her down to kneeling and up to you for extra dialogue.

    Dialogue writer note: Thank you for your help but somehow I was never able to get the FINISHES to work as I wanted to step through an escalation in the dialogue. I tried ensuring only he spoke and using [variables] with no joy. Instead, I used wake (part one) and then cum events (part two) as triggers.

    I haven't started part three yet. So if you have anything you want me to include, just let me know and I'll use your idea if it fits in the story.

    Enjoy!
     
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    Re: Astounded's Dialogues [Added P1&2 of Candice Trilogy]

    Took me 15 minutes to see the accepting dialogue through - maybe begin new lines, in new lines ^^

    and .. the last line (Fucked) doesnt even trigger?!
     
  15. astounded

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    Re: Astounded's Dialogues [Added P1&2 of Candice Trilogy]

    Thanks for the feedback!

    Scene #1 only turns to an accepting situation when [resigned] is triggered from a [wake] state. For variety, this doesn't happen every time immediately.

    I've removed that vestigial [fucked] line (thanks) from #1. It wasn't used.

    P.S. I hope the 15 minutes until she accepted were well spent ;D
     
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    Re: Astounded's Dialogues [Added P1&2 of Candice Trilogy]

    When will you be writing up part #3 of Candice?
     
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    Re: Astounded's Dialogues [Added P1&2 of Candice Trilogy]

    i am a little confused, how do you pull her up and push her down??
    is it just changing the "Style" in the menu???
     
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    Re: Astounded's Dialogues [Added P1&2 of Candice Trilogy]

    Thanks for asking. It is pretty done at 56k but lacks... inspiration in my view. I'm open to new ideas on how the plot should go.
     
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    Re: Astounded's Dialogues [Added P1&2 of Candice Trilogy]

    Hold the mouse button down and then guide her up and down. The should force her body to move into the two other positions of pulled_up and pushed_down.
     
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    Re: Astounded's Dialogues [Added P1&2 of Candice Trilogy]

    Thanks, that makes it much better. Great job on the dialogues by the way, only one i havent tried is bad girl, YET!