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TM94's Dialogues - Jingle balls and mistletoe.

Discussion in 'Dialogue' started by LN1990, Oct 20, 2013.

  1. LN1990

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    Hello and welcome to TM94's Dialogues, hope you enjoy what I've written.
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    She is coming.

    I am open to requests, I'll only accept them if I know the character well enough or if I have a lot of interest in them.

    Latest Update: Fixed Jinx's Anarchy, hopefully for the last time.


    Jinx's Anarchy v2

    Jinx is running riot as usual and she stumbles across you hiding for your life, and lucky for you, Jinx wants to play.
    You will need to set your name for this dialogue due to me using back and forth speech. You may also need to rename Jinx if you've got here as anything other than that.

    [attachurl=6]

    If you need Jinx then go to Dante's Lovely Ladies.


    DOTA Series 1

    Lost in the woods with Windrunner.

    After 18 straight hours of DOTA 2 you fall asleep only to wake up in a forest with a pretty ginger girl looking over you, will she help you?
    Notes: Lyralei is less prone to anger and ahegao moods, sitting in happy most of the time. There are also references to series 2 dialogues and hints to what series 2 will be about.

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    A hunters prey with Drow Ranger. (2014)

    After your encounter with Windrunner you're trying to make it back to the fountain when an arrow hit's your in the foot, seems this Drow wants to play with it's prey before killing it.
    Notes: Traxex is less prone to happy and ahegao moods, sitting in angry most of the time. There are also references to series 2 dialogues and hints to what series 2 will be about.

    Playing with fire with Lina. (2014)

    You managed to escape Traxex's grip and make it to tier 3, exhausted and injured you see a fiery red-head appear. She offers to help you, but she wants something in return, will you?
    Notes: Lina is less prone to anger moods, sitting in happy most of the time. There are also references to series 2 dialogues and hints to what series 2 will be about and who's in it.

    Pain and pleasure with Queen of Pain. (2014)

    With the help of Lina you reach the fountain and heal, only to find your way out is on the other side. Whilst trying to cross the river you hear it, a deafening shriek, it paralyzes you , all you can see is a shadowy figure laughing. Can you survive?
    Notes: Akasha is less prone to anger, normal and happy moods, sitting in ahegao pretty much all the time, going from ahegao is tough but opens some weird and nasty dialogues. There are also references to series 2 dialogues and hints to what series 2 will be about and who's in it.
    Also I do realize that there is no current costume or hair for QoP but I am hoping it spurs someone to make one.

    Taming the beast with Luna. (2014)

    You've been rescued by ginger woodswoman, captured by a cold hearted Drow, warmed up by a fiery pyromancer and tortured by a psychopathic dominatrix now your final meeting is with a beast riding guardian who seems hell bent on making sure she pleases the dark moon. I'm sure you got some fight left in you right?
    Notes: Luna is less prone to happy moods, sitting in normal for the majority, if you manage to get her happy you unlock some new finishes but if you get her angry it get's close to ritualistic. There are also references to who is in series 2 and why you'll be back again.


    Hex Maniac's Horrifying Mischief. (2014)

    You see a girl crying, you go over to see if she is OK but before you can say anything she turns and asks. Are you are the one? well, are you?


    Original Characters

    The Stacy Harvey adventures.
    Episode 1 - Stacy Harvey and her obsession confession.

    It's party time and some wise guy has decided to get a game of spin the bottle going it eventually lands on Stacy's turn and she unfortunately lands on you. So now you have to spend 10 minutes inside the closet with your creepy stalker.

    Episode 2 - Stacy Harvey, bruises and water snakes. (2014)

    After spending hours inside that closet you decide to date your creepy stalker. It's the Friday after and you're about to go out, you decide to take a shower when you get an unexpected visit.
    CharCode:
    Note: If you want hair that looks more like hers then use a hair called "sdthair_redhead2" and make it black.
    [attachurl=2]


    Sophie Day the professional relationship fixer.
    Sophie Day's big marital problems.

    Accusations of cheating, going to strip clubs and hitting on your sister in law has caused your marriage to fall apart and with no way to fix it on your own, you seek out the best fixer in the business. Can you fix what is inevitably broken?
    CharCode:
    Note: You must set a name for yourself otherwise some lines can see strange.
    [attachurl=3]


    Zoey Sharp and the Dub Muffs.
    Coming 2014.




    Scenario's

    Evil Judge gives you hard time.
    You were caught with what can only be described as fornicating with a horse and now you've just been sentenced to 5 years in prison. But the judge has a better idea.
    [attachurl=4]

    Jingle balls and mistletoe. (Requires Loader, Dialogue Actions)
    It's Christmas and the love is flowing. Everyone is having a good time, getting drunk and eating food. You pass your mum or sister in the hallway and she stops you and tells you to look up, above you is mistletoe. Let's just say they don't want to give you a kiss on the cheek.
    This will be a zip file containing the backgrounds alongside the dialogue.

    Jingle balls and mistletoe.

    SDT-ception. (2014)
    After writing numerous dialogues for SDT you get careless and leave it open in your browser. Unfortunately you girlfriend finds it and says she will expose you to your friends unless you write her inside of a new dialogue and she wants to provide the material.

    The lesbian preference. (2014)(Requires Loader, Dialogue Actions and Animtools)
    Coming 2014.

    Dry cut and blow job. (2014)
    You go for your regular 6 week hair cut and you are offered a pubic trim as repayment for your loyal custom. But after being surprised at your size she decides to give you a little some extra.

    A furry dream come true. (2014)(Requires Loader, Dialogue Actions)
    Coming 2014.

    A furry best friend. (2014)(Requires Loader, Dialogue Actions)
    Coming 2014.

    Mile High. (2014)
    It's your first time flying 1st class, your about halfway through your flight when you notice the stewardess checking you out, you ignore it and decide to take a leak. As soon as your pants hit the floor the door bursts open and she comes crashing into you, mouth first, onto your crotch. I guess she wants to give you a 1st class experience.

    Basement beauty. (2014)
    Coming 2014.

    Gas and blow.. (2014)
    Your doing yet another long haul, your gas is low and you need to sleep, so you pull into the gas station and notice a sign. "You pump, we blow."
    You ignore it and fill up the tank, a girl comes rushing out, tits exposed shouting "Don't forget your blow!"
    Who are you to argue.


    Doctor, Who? (2014)(Requires Loader, Dialogue Actions)
    It is he siege of Trenzalore, where the 11th must fall. Your companion as clueless as he is manages to drag your dying body inside the TARDIS, this brave stupidity has given you the chance to regenerate, don't waste it.

    Can I borrow some sugar, Sugar?(2014)
    Coming 2014.

    A happy ending.(2014)(Requires Loader, Dialogue Actions and Animtools)
    Coming 2014.

    Unamed spa dialogue.(2014)(Requires Loader, Dialogue Actions and Animtools)
    Coming 2014.

    The girl next door.(2014)(Requires Loader, Dialogue Actions and Animtools)
    Coming 2014.

    Helping the nanny.(2014)
    Coming 2014.

    Robbing the robber.(2014)(Requires Loader, Dialogue Actions and Animtools)
    Coming 2014.

    Paying the rent.(2014)
    Coming 2014.

    Helping the blind to feel.(2014)
    Coming 2014.

    Ploughing the farmers daughter.(2014)(Requires Loader, Dialogue Actions and Animtools)
    Coming 2014.

    Lost and alone.(2014)(Requires Loader, Dialogue Actions and Animtools)
    I've actually forgotten what the hell this was supposed to be...go me.

    Fun at the beach.(2014)(Requires Loader, Dialogue Actions and Animtools)
    You and your girlfriend are relaxing on the beach, you decide to get a bit frisky and what turns from a secretive blowjob becomes a full on sex display.

    A honeymoon to remember.(2014)(Requires Loader and Dialogue Actions)
    A romantic dialogue.

    A romantic anniversary.(2014)(Requires Loader and Dialogue Actions)
    A romantic dialogue.


    Requests

    Anon - Guy using sex robot and robot male with human female.

    To-do list.

    Everything on this list will get done eventually. The list is in order of what gets done first, it will change.

    The Girl in the red dress.
    Can I borrow some sugar, Sugar?
    Gas and blow.
    Mile High.
    Paying the rent.
    A furry best friend.
    Snow White.
    Cinderella.
    A furry dream come true.
    A honeymoon to remember.
    SDT-ception.
    Doctor, Who?
    A romantic anniversary.
    Fun at the beach.
    Lost and alone.
    Ploughing the farmers daughter.
    Helping the blind to feel.
    Robbing the robber.
    Busty Red Riding Hood.
    Helping the nanny.
    The girl next door.
    Unamed spa dialogue.
    A happy ending.
    Basement beauty.
    Rythum SDT
    On set (porn artist)
    Spaceship taken over by space pirates.
    Office blowjob.
    Public blowjob.
    Public Sex.
    Stowaway (pirate ship)
    Japanese sensei training.
    Enderman cosplay.
    Meeting the native. (Scenario with a jungle dweller)
    Hex Maniac's Horrifying Mischief.
    DOTA Series 1

    My dialogue template. The one I use as a base for all my dialogues.
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  2. Pixell

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    Re: LN's Dialogues - Jinx's Anarchy

    Good work, im waiting for ur 3 dota girls :)
     
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    Re: LN's Dialogues - Jinx's Anarchy

    thaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaank youuuuuuuuuuuuuu sirrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr
     
  4. LN1990

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    Re: LN's Dialogues - Jinx's Anarchy

    No problem, it's a bit cookie cutter atm but looking to work on this for a while making it better and adding more content. Any suggestions for it would be great.
     
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    Re: LN's Dialogues - Jinx's Anarchy

    Nice dialogue! A complete character on SDT!
     
  7. LN1990

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    Feel quite honored now. :D
     
  8. LN1990

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    Re: LN's Dialogues - Jinx's Anarchy

    Started work on v2.

    The jist of it is she doesn't like you putting your fat hands on her, each time you do without her saying you can will cause her mood to get worse until she stops allowing you to put it in.

    Some actions will increase her mood which will unlock more dialogue and allow you to use your hands without penalty.

    Now I've heard you can use dialogues to move positions? If that's true then v3 will be a loader dialogue that will allow actual sex using animtools. Of course that's only if it's possible.
     
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    Awesome...it's only going to get better and better... EDIT: I don't know... I want to figure that out as well, to spam the clench teeth lol.
     
  10. LN1990

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    How would I loop or prolong the [CLENCH_TEETH] trigger?

    Or am I just going to have to spam it for 9 lines to get a long enough time?
     
  11. LN1990

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    Re: LN's Dialogues - Jinx's Anarchy

    Good news, v2's lines are nearly done just need to add actions etc.

    Gone from 143 lines (all in) to 207 lines (all in) and I might come up with more.

    I've tried to catch Jinx's personality as much as I could but if you feel a line is out of place let me know and I'll try and tweak it.
     
  12. Pim_gd

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    Re: LN's Dialogues - Jinx's Anarchy

    Feedback for v1.1
    Missing sentence ending on
    Line 5:
    Code: intro:"[RELEASE][ARMS_LEGS][NORMAL_MOOD]Ooo what do we have here,[TAP_HANDS][TAP_HANDS] seems I missed a bit[intro1]"
    Output: "Ooo what do we have here, seems I missed a bit"

    Line 56:
    Code: pulled_up:"Hey! easy"
    Output: "Hey! easy"

    Line 67:
    Code: pull_off:"Maybe I've met my match....nah"
    Output: "Maybe I've met my match....nah"

    Line 79:
    Code: vigorous:"Oo getting dizzy"
    Output: "Oo getting dizzy"

    Line 89:
    Code: cum_on_face:"Seems I got Jinx'd"
    Output: "Seems I got Jinx'd"

    Line 106:
    Code: cum_in_nose:"And for my next trick"
    Output: "And for my next trick"

    Line 124:
    Code: finish7:"Yawn"{"style":"Thought"}
    Output: "Yawn"

    Typo
    Line 110: swallow:"Let's see if you got anymore!"
    anymore -> any more

    Dialogue Checker Major issues:
    Line Usage - Major: Line 98 is unused!
    Line 98: Cum_in_throat:"That should keep the anarchy flowing!"{"style":"Thought"}
    //use cum_in_throat

    Line Usage - Major: Line 99 is unused!
    Line 99: Cum_in_throat:"At least I didn't have to taste it this time. Yuck!"{"style":"Thought"}
    //use cum_in_throat

    Line Usage - Major: Line 100 is unused!
    Line 100: Cum_in_throat:"Those better be blanks!"{"style":"Thought"}
    //use cum_in_throat

    Line Usage - Major: Line 135 is unused!
    Line 135: vigourous:"CLEAR"
    //use vigorous
     
  13. LN1990

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    Thanks for that will add that to v2 rather than make it 1.2 as v2 should be out tonight.

    That checker is stupidly helpful.
     
  14. LN1990

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    V2 is done! Get it while it's hot!
     
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    Spoilers because when you're typing in tiny windows you don't quite realize the amount of mistakes you can find in one go
    Line 69: lick_balls:"*ME*%3A Can I take these with me?%0A*YOU*%3A NO!%0A*ME*%3A Aww..no fair."{"mood":"Ahegao"}
    Try not to short-circuit dialogues like this.
    Just expand them into lick_ballssomething (lick_balls2 if you have to, maybe something that makes a bit more sense).

    Line 80: pulled_up:"Hey! easy."{"mood":"Happy"}
    I think "easy" should be capitalized (as "Easy" to make "Hey! Easy.")

    Line 83: pulled_up:"Oh, hello."{"mood":"Ahegao"}
    Ahaha, that's nice

    Line 89: first_throat:"aghck, that hurt!"{"mood":"Angry"}
    Missing capital at the start

    Line 122: vigorous:"To fast! TO FAST!"{"style":"Thought"}
    and then we will go to the supermarket, and to the bank, and...
    to x = towards x
    too x = more x than required or wanted
    "To fast" -> "Too fast"

    Line 127: pre_cum:"*YOU*%3A Oh wow, I'm cumming%0A*ME*%3A Whatever, let's just start shooting!"{"mood":"Angry"}
    Line 128: pre_cum:"*YOU*%3A I'm nearly there!%0A*ME*%3A I'm trying to care but I just can't!"{"mood":"Normal"}
    Try not to short-circuit dialogues.

    Line 137: cum_on_face:"Now you've shot me, I'm gonna shoot youБББББББББББББББ%0AHmm, nah, I changed my mind."{"mood":"Angry"}
    Missing sentence ending.
    Output: "Now you've shot me, I'm gonna shoot you
    Hmm, nah, I changed my mind."
    Suggested fix:
    "I'm gonna shoot youБББББББББББББББ%0AHmm" -> "I'm gonna shoot youББББ.ББББ.ББББ.БББ%0AHmm"

    Line 149: cum_in_throat:"Aww I wanted to keep 'em"{"mood":"Happy"}
    Missing sentence ending.
    (I really ought to implement that in the checker one day)

    Line 155: cum_in_eye:"[CLOSE_EYES][ADD_TEARS]Hey, that's not nice[ANGRY_MOOD]"{"mood":"Normal"}
    Missing sentence ending.

    Line 167: cum_in_nose:"My nose is all blocked now."{"mood":"Normal"}
    When cum_in_nose triggers, it's spraying out of her nose. Wouldn't that just clear all gunk in there, ... or would some of the semen get stuck in there? Hmm. Needs more research.

    Line 29: resistance:"Humph, no fair.%0AUrgh fine, you can use your fat hands.[HOLD]"{"mood":"Ahegao"}
    Line 58: hand_job_stroke:"I'll give you to the count of - time's up![EJACULATE][hand_job_stroke2]"{"mood":"Ahegao","held":"false"}
    Line 63: head_grabbed:"You could use my 'tails you know, not that I'm asking.."{"mood":"Ahegao"}
    Line 69: lick_balls:"*ME*%3A Can I take these with me?%0A*YOU*%3A NO!%0A*ME*%3A Aww..no fair."{"mood":"Ahegao"}
    Line 83: pulled_up:"Oh, hello."{"mood":"Ahegao"}
    Line 91: first_throat:"Hmm, I want more, gimmie more!"{"mood":"Ahegao"}
    Line 93: first_dt:"Yaha, I did it, told you I could!"{"mood":"Ahegao"}
    Line 102: pull_off:"Humph I can do this!"{"mood":"Ahegao"}
    Line 107: held:"[COUGH][COUGH]БББББББББББББББAGAIN!"{"mood":"Ahegao"}
    Line 114: wake:"[COUGH]Ooo, ugh, I had a bitchin' dream about blowing stuff up..."{"mood":"Ahegao"}
    Line 118: vigorous:"WEEEEEE!"{"mood":"Ahegao"}
    Line 130: pre_cum:"Give me your super mega death rocket!"{"mood":"Ahegao"}
    Line 133: cum_on_face:"Seems I got Jinx'd."{"mood":"Ahegao"}
    Line 142: cum_in_mouth:"Yum, yum, yum!"{"mood":"Ahegao"}
    Line 150: cum_in_throat:"You'll be safe down there little guys."{"mood":"Ahegao"}
    Line 157: cum_in_eye:"[ADD_TEARS]You look funny [LOOK_UP]through this stuff haha."{"mood":"Ahegao"}
    Line 165: cum_in_nose:"[SHOCK]Oooo tingly, do it again!"{"mood":"Ahegao"}
    Line 175: swallow:"Tingly tingles all the way down hehehehe."{"mood":"Ahegao"}
    Line 181: drool:"I like being messy hehee."{"mood":"Ahegao"}
    Line 195: finish10:"TsaHahahehehehahahahahahaБББББББhah!"{"mood":"Ahegao"}

    Assuming that you don't start out as Ahegao,
    These lines are unused. You can play them in the dialogue editor - and you can access them by manually setting the mood to Ahegao but it won't do so by itself.
    In other words: You have lines that require Ahegao mood, but 0 instances of [AHEGAO_MOOD].

    Line 193: finish8:"That was fun, let's go again!"{"mood":"Happy"}
    Line 194: finish9:"One more time but you better not put your fat hands on me again butt face!"{"mood":"Angry"}
    Line 195: finish10:"TsaHahahehehehahahahahahaБББББББhah!"{"mood":"Ahegao"}

    Try not to put mood requirements on finishers. I'm not sure, but it either might break *FINISHES* or they'll get ignored. I suppose testing this with a finishOther and a finish0 with mood requirements would show whether SDT accepts mood checks on finishers.

    Well, you've given me something new to add to the checker - checks for moods used/moods set.
     
  16. LN1990

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    Not sure what your referring to on "Line 83", Line 167 you're on your own with that one ;D
    Glad I could be of service anyway?

    Anyway I'm done with Jinx for now as I want to get the DOTA girls out soon. So expect that soonish.

    Also Pim_gd, use spoilers ::)
     
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    Is most of the Dota 2 girls made here?
     
  18. LN1990

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    Windrunner, Drow and Lina are.

    Out of the 5 I'm doing dialogues for 4 are available, I'm hoping the dialogue sprouts someone to make her.
     
  19. LN1990

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    Re: LN's Dialogues - Lost in the woods with Windrunner

    Lost in the woods with Windrunner is out, check the spoilers to get it.

    Any problems let me know and I'll fix them tonight.
     
  20. Pim_gd

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    Re: LN's Dialogues - Lost in the woods with Windrunner

    Pfff
    There's a lot in here...

    Line 6: intro:"[introfalse]"
    You set played in initial_settings but you don't use that variable.
    Checker doesn't catch this because variable checking isn't done properly yet.

    Line 8: intro1:"[NORMAL_STYLE][NORMAL_MOOD][RELEASE]Oh, hello?[LOOK_UP] Are you Ok?ББББББ[intro2]"
    "Ok" -> "OK" OR "ok" OR "okay" (capitalization)

    Line 12: intro5:"It's OK, I'll look after you, but first it seems you need to releive some tension.[LEFT_ARM_HIS_LEGS][RIGHT_ARM_LEGS][intro6]"
    "releive" -> "relieve"

    Line 15: intro8:"[SHOCK]This guys arrow is HUGE![intro9]"{"style":"Thought"}
    I think, but I'm not sure, it's "This guy's arrow"

    Line 17: intro10:"Ok.[intro11]"{"style":"Him"}
    Line 18: intro11:"I'm*YOU*by the way.[intro12]"{"style":"Him"}
    Unrewriteable introduction line.
    Fix as follows:
    intro10:"Ok.[intro11]*[YOU][intro11Named]*"{"style":"Him"}
    intro11:"I'm... wait, I can't remember my name![intro12]"{"style":"Him"}
    intro11Named:"I'm* YOU* by the way.[intro12Named]"{"style":"Him"}
    intro12:"That's pretty bad. I'm Lyralei, now let me look after you."{"set":{"played":"true"}}
    intro12Named:"Hi, I'm Lyralei, now let me look after you."{"set":{"played":"true"}}

    Feel free to rewrite as necessary.

    Line 21: general:"You know, my parents warned me about crazy men in the forest, but you seem all right to me *ME*"{"mood":"Normal"}
    Missing sentence ending, HER name doesn't have to be set but you refer to it on line 19 anyway so why would she even HAVE a different name...
    Either hardcode it or don't
    Actually wait what, she's gonna say her own name? Is she talking to herself?

    Line 41: resistance:"Hmm, my throat is as tight as my bow strings."{"style":"Thought"}
    "bow strings" -> "bowstrings"
    one word, I believe
    (Also, how is a bowstring "tight"?)

    Line 66: hand_job_stroke:"Nothing get's the arm stronger Ha-ha-ha!"{"mood":"Happy"}
    train wreck
    "get's" -> "gets" and "Ha-ha-ha" -> "ha-ha-ha"...
    And then the sentence still looks weird.

    Line 67: hand_job_stroke:""
    Line 68: hand_job_stroke:""
    why would you have empty lines?

    Line 71: hand_job_stroke:"Focus.....ББББ[EJACULATE][hand_job_stroke2]"{"mood":"Ahegao"}
    Line 73: hand_job_stroke2:"Ha, see? Easy breezy."
    This set of lines has high-risk of getting interrupted by cum_on_face
    Not saying it's bad but still

    Line 81: head_grabbed:"Please don't mess up my hair, a girls gotta look good when fighting hehe."
    "a girls gotta" looks strange.
    EITHER "a girl has gotta" OR "a girl has to" (look good)

    Line 84: head_grabbedr2:"come on, pull me up, it might work better."
    Missing capitalization at sentence start
    come -> Come

    Line 88: lick_balls:"Do you like this?[lick_balls2]"
    Line 91: lick_balls2:"Yeah, I like it a lot!"
    She's talking to herself

    Line 89: lick_balls:"How does that feel?[lick_balls3]"
    Line 92: lick_balls3:"Wow, feels great."
    and again
    Do me and yourself a favor...
    group related lines together
    Especially those head_grabbedr lines - they're like, hidden somewhere in the dialogue and that's not pleasant to work with


    Line 98: lick_penis:"Taste my arrow.[lick_penis2]"{"style":"Him","mood":"Happy","mood":"Angry"}
    Does this work?
    And why does the checker not complain about this?
    A quick test shows me that the happy mood is ignored here.

    Line 111: pulled_up:"Yes, What's the matter?"{"held":"true"}
    "What's" -> "what's"

    Line 114: first_throat:"Seems I got a mouth full here."{"style":"Thought"}
    "I got a mouth full" -> EITHER "I got my mouth full" (seems logical) OR "I got a mouthful" (A bit less, unless precum?)

    Line 117: first_throat:"I can feel it throbing, please don't get any bigger."{"style":"Thought"}
    "throbing" -> "throbbing"

    Line 123: first_dt:"You Skewered me."
    "Skewered" -> "skewered"

    Line 154: vigorous:"Oo getting dizzy"
    Missing sentence ending.

    Line 173: cum_on_face:"You've got to be kidding me..[cum_on_face2]"{"mood":"Normal"}
    personally I feel it's either 1 period (a period) or 3 periods (ellipsis) and never 2 periods.
    Do as you like.

    Line 179: cum_in_mouth:"Is it OK if I spit it out? i'm not a fan of the taste.[DROOL]"
    "i'm" -> "I'm"

    Line 180: cum_in_mouth:"Is your quiver is empty?[cum_in_mouth2]"{"mood":"Normal"}
    "Is your quiver is empty?" -> "Is your quiver empty?"

    Line 202: cum_in_nose:"Where the heck did that come from?[ANGRY_MOOD][cum_in_nose2]"{"mood":"Normal"}
    Line 205: cum_in_nose2:"Your nose....[cum_in_nose3]"
    Talking to herself again

    Line 217: drool:"[LOOK_UP]I'm sorry but it was just to much to swallow.[LOOK_DOWN]"{"mood":"Happy"}
    "to much" -> "too much"

    I don't see finishOther and I'm not sure what will happen
    I expect "nine times" and "ten times"
    That's gonna be ugly

    And as such it took longer than expected. Guess I'll look at the checker's failings tomorrow.
    EDIT: Of course, having said that, I went and took a look at it anyway. Checker didn't check for duplicate values for mood, style, held. Fixed in v2.09, expect that one tomorrow. Bug since v1.16 (reeaaaly old one)