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Tribal Torment: The director's cut

Discussion in 'Fiction' started by Raden, May 16, 2012.

  1. Raden

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    this is like that DVD extra, the original ending of Tribal Torment. Enjoy.

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    "Fletcher, is the car ready?"

    "Yes, Miss Rochefort. It is running and ready."

    Lili cut off the call. Then she strode up to Julia's door, and rapped three times on it. Taking a straight-bar knuckle duster out of the pocket of her jeans, she slipped it on to her right hand, and cocked her fist.

    Julia groggily yelled from the other side of the door "Fuck off and go away!"

    Lili paused, resigned herself to defeat and went back to her room.

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    .......... lol
     
  2. TheCrimsonRisk

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    A vast improvement over the original.
     
  3. Raden

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    Yeah, unsurprisingly you're "that guy"... lol.