Farm Sex rework/edit (1 Viewer)

[AureumCustos]

All credit for this dialogue goes to enflame who made it. I just took the dialogue and proofread and added some more to the dialogue so that she is talking about a horse. If you see that I missed any errors or grammar mistakes reply below. All in all, I have to say enflames grammar and typing isn't that bad. I've seen worse. (Yahoo ask~DEAR GOD) If anybody has any other dialogues that they would like me to proofread or spruce up just ask. I'll be here all day folks.

 

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Hello AureumCustos , thank you for your dialogue rework!
May I suggest to you a dialogue checker tool, DialogueChecker, made by @Pim_gd ?

Checking your dialogue, it found 5 issue(s) with your dialogue, of which 0 were severe, 3 were major issues, and 2 were minor issues (see the log below).
Four of them are about the * character, because you can only use * for variable names, and one of them is about a sentence starting with a comma after stripping the line of delay characters and triggers.

One last thing: it could be nice to point to @enflame's original dialogue in your original post.

Keep up the good work!

Spoiler: DialogueChecker log

Dialogue was checked in 170 ms with v3.07 of the DialogueChecker.

I found 5 issue(s) with your dialogue, of which 0 were severe, 3 were major issues, and 2 were minor issues.



Syntax - Major: An uneven amount of asterisks was found on line 71. This could indicate a coding error.

Line 71: resistance:"Hold on* almost there.."



Variables - Major: Undeclared variable (" almost there.."") in a variable insertion (* almost there.."*) on line 71, col -1, near "Can't create snippet - parsing error".

Line 71: resistance:"Hold on* almost there.."



Grammar - Minor: The following issue was found after stripping the line of delay characters and triggers.

Keep in mind that you can place characters in YOU/YOUR/ME/MY variable insertions, like "Hello*, YOU*!".

Sentence starting with a comma (grammatical error) on dialogue line on line 76, col 9 near "vigorous:", (...)"

Line 76: vigorous:"*YOU*, give me it!"

Stripped Line 76: vigorous:", give me it!"



Grammar - Minor: The following issue was found after stripping the line of delay characters and triggers.

Keep in mind that you can place characters in YOU/YOUR/ME/MY variable insertions, like "Hello*, YOU*!".

Double space on line 82, col 48 near "(...) of cock.""

You can disable this check manually by putting #DialogueChecker-NoDoubleSpace# at the top of your dialogue if you prefer to keep double spaces without the checker complaining about them.

Line 82: vigorous:"My pain will be a constant reminder of *YOUR* cock."

Stripped Line 82: vigorous:"My pain will be a constant reminder of cock."



Syntax - Major: An uneven amount of asterisks was found on line 94. This could indicate a coding error.

Line 94: intro:"I dont think it can fit*!"



Once you've fixed these issues, try letting me look your dialogue over again. Maybe I'll find something new.