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[onlinehero]

Nice one! I just have difficulties imagining Helena as a bad guy though :)
Poll is pretty fun idea too.

 

[Seth]

Good job. Lei Fang is still my fav Doa girl, but you did good work with Kokoro as well.

 

[Seth]

Didn't play 5th part, so I can't say anything about it, but I always found Lei Fang hottest Doa girl.
Btw. you could use costume change idea from Dead or Alive: Paradise in the next parts.

 

[onlinehero]

Maybe you could read some stories that others have posted and see what kind of things you enjoy in them? I don't really know much about fiction writing so hard to say what to improve... all that comes to my mind is changing the plot to something more simplier and to more resemble something that could happen in the game (universe). For example in DOA4 story (don't remember whether it's Leifang's or Bass') Bass comes angry out of threater throwing people to walls and stuff, and Leifang tries to stop him/teach that bully a lesson. I think you could get some ryona story out of that for example.

After 5:00

 

[wilhitewarrior]

Kasumi it is. Although, someone else just did one and what I had in my head was kinda like that... So... Tell me what I should do

I'm sorry! No reason you can't do your own version though

 

[wilhitewarrior]

well kasi is one of those characters that will always be hot tho imo :D