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MotherSon Dialogue Testsample

Discussion in 'Dialogue' started by EpicDT-Hunter1, Jan 8, 2015.

  1. EpicDT-Hunter1

    EpicDT-Hunter1 Potential Patron

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    Hey Guys I was looking around for some MotherSonDialogues but only found many FatherDaughterDialogues so I decided to take it in my own hand creating a pleasing scenario between a Mother and her son (you). The result of my effort made me shoot a couple of times at first, course i personaly like the aspect of dominating and take control of a powerfull person like your own mother during the act (I know im a sick dude something may went wrong in my childhood). Anyway as I looked objektive at the dialogue I was disapointed how unrealistic it is so I gave up working on it. Dont get me wrong I still think Its a good work of mine, but not the result I want. But you can make a picture of it yourself:

     

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  2. Firestorm5

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    cool txt dude
     
  3. EpicDT-Hunter1

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    Thank you!!! I saw you did a MomSon dialogue too. Ill have a look on it later. Keep it up bro :D We need more MomSon Dialogues.
     
  4. tmb

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    Hi, I checked your dialogue (January 08, 2015, 10:08:27 version) with Pim_gd's DialogueChecker v.2.22 (see it's own thread: http://www.sdtmods.com/index.php?topic=3820.0).

    It found 17 issue(s) with your dialogue, of which 0 were severe, 12 were major issues, and 5 were minor issues.
    Code:
    Dialogue was checked in 75 ms with v2.22 of the DialogueChecker.
    
    I found 17 issue(s) with your dialogue, of which 0 were severe, 12 were major issues, and 5 were minor issues.
    
    
    
    Variables - Major: Undeclared variable (chapter) in line-attribute check on line 5, col 139, near "(...)ББББББББББББББББББББ[intro1]"{"check":{"chapter":0}}".
    
    To fix this, add the variable to the initial_settings line of your dialogue.
    
    Line 5: intro:"[NORMAL_STYLE][RELEASE][NORMAL_MOOD][ARMS_LEGS][LOOK_UP]Good Morning *YOU*.БББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББ[intro1]"{"check":{"chapter":0}}
    
    
    
    Grammar - Minor: The following issue was found after stripping the line of delay characters, triggers and variable substitutions.
    
    Keep in mind that you can place characters in YOU/YOUR/ME/MY variable insertions, like "Hello*, YOU*!".
    
    Space before period for new line on line 8, col 28 near "(...) sweet . Now (...)"
    
    Line 8: intro3:"[HAPPY_MOOD]Aww you are so sweet *YOU*.ББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББ[LEFT_ARM_HIS_LEGS] Now relax and let mommy work for her breakfast.[RIGHT_ARM_HIS_LEGS][LOOK_DOWN]БББББББББББББББББББББББББББББ[intro4]"
    
    Stripped Line 8: intro3:"Aww you are so sweet . Now relax and let mommy work for her breakfast."
    
    
    
    Variables - Major: Undeclared variable (chapter) in line-attribute set on line 9, col 138, near "(...) day."{"style":"Him","set":{"chapter":"+1"}}".
    
    To fix this, add the variable to the initial_settings line of your dialogue.
    
    Line 9: intro4:"Yes mommy.ББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББ What a good start in the day."{"style":"Him","set":{"chapter":"+1"}}
    
    
    
    Grammar - Minor: The following issue was found after stripping the line of delay characters, triggers and variable substitutions.
    
    Keep in mind that you can place characters in YOU/YOUR/ME/MY variable insertions, like "Hello*, YOU*!".
    
    Grammatical error (space before question mark) on line 11, col 46 near "(...) piercing ? (...)"
    
    Line 11: lick_penis:"Do you like my new tongue piercing *YOU*?БББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББ I made it for you.БББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББ[lick_p_res]"
    
    Stripped Line 11: lick_penis:"Do you like my new tongue piercing ? I made it for you."
    
    
    
    Grammar - Minor: The following issue was found after stripping the line of delay characters, triggers and variable substitutions.
    
    Keep in mind that you can place characters in YOU/YOUR/ME/MY variable insertions, like "Hello*, YOU*!".
    
    Space before period for new line on line 15, col 52 near "(...) tasty . I (...)"
    
    Line 15: lick_balls:"Mmmmmmh.ББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББ Your balls are so big and tasty *YOU*.БББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББ I could lick them all day long.БББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББ[lick_b_res]"
    
    Stripped Line 15: lick_balls:"Mmmmmmh. Your balls are so big and tasty . I could lick them all day long."
    
    
    
    Line Usage - Major: Line 17 is unused!
    
    Line 17: resistanceline1:"You made lipsticksmearing on my stiff stab mommy.БББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББ[resp_res]"{"style":"Him","set":{"resistancecount":2}}
    
    
    
    Line Usage - Major: Line 21 is unused!
    
    Line 21: resistanceline2:"[LOOK_UP]The way you look at me, while im sucking your cock, makes me forget everything."{"set":{"resistancecount":3}}
    
    
    
    Line Usage - Major: Line 22 is unused!
    
    Line 22: resistanceline3:"Mmmmmmh.БББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББ Your big sword tastes so good honey.БББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББ[resp_res2]"{"set":{"resistancecount":4}}
    
    
    
    Line Usage - Major: Line 24 is unused!
    
    Line 24: resistanceline4:"Do you want mommy to go deeper honey?БББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББ[resp_ft]"{"set":{"resistancecount":5}}
    
    
    
    Grammar - Minor: The following issue was found after stripping the line of delay characters, triggers and variable substitutions.
    
    Keep in mind that you can place characters in YOU/YOUR/ME/MY variable insertions, like "Hello*, YOU*!".
    
    Grammatical error (space before question mark) on line 31, col 61 near "(...) cock ?""
    
    Line 31: vigorousChapter1:"Do you like how mommy deepthroats your cock *YOU*?ББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББ[vig_an]"
    
    Stripped Line 31: vigorousChapter1:"Do you like how mommy deepthroats your cock ?"
    
    
    
    Grammar - Minor: The following issue was found after stripping the line of delay characters, triggers and variable substitutions:
    
    Space at start of new line on line 46, col 9 near "devotion5:" Like (...)"
    
    Line 46: devotion5:"[RIGHT_ARM_BACK]ББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББ[LEFT_ARM_BACK]ББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББ[FACE_FUCK_STYLE] Like this?ББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББ[devotion6]"
    
    Stripped Line 46: devotion5:" Like this?"
    
    
    
    Variables - Major: Undeclared variable (chapter) in line-attribute set on line 47, col 325, near "(...)OOK_DOWN][SHOCK]"{"style":"Him","set":{"chapter":2}}".
    
    To fix this, add the variable to the initial_settings line of your dialogue.
    
    Line 47: devotion6:"Gooood.ББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББ Now open your mouth and relaxe your throat.ББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББ I will ram my dick deep and fast in.ББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББ I wont have mercy slut.ББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББББ[LOOK_DOWN][SHOCK]"{"style":"Him","set":{"chapter":2}}
    
    
    
    Variables - Major: Undeclared variable (chapter) in a variable insertion in a trigger ([vigorousChapter*chapter*]) on line 64, col 10, near "vigorous:"[vigorousChapter*chapter*]"{"style":"Thought"}".
    
    Line 64: vigorous:"[vigorousChapter*chapter*]"{"style":"Thought"}
    
    
    
    Variables - Major: Undeclared variable (chapter) in a variable insertion in a trigger ([pre_cumChapter*chapter*]) on line 65, col 9, near "pre_cum:"[pre_cumChapter*chapter*]"{"style":"Thought"}".
    
    Line 65: pre_cum:"[pre_cumChapter*chapter*]"{"style":"Thought"}
    
    
    
    Variables - Major: Undeclared variable (chapter) in a variable insertion in a trigger ([cum_in_throatchapter*chapter*]) on line 66, col 15, near "cum_in_throat:"[cum_in_throatchapter*chapter*]"{"style":"Thought"}".
    
    Line 66: cum_in_throat:"[cum_in_throatchapter*chapter*]"{"style":"Thought"}
    
    
    
    Variables - Major: Undeclared variable (chapter) in a variable insertion in a trigger ([cum_on_facechapter*chapter*]) on line 67, col 13, near "cum_on_face:"[cum_on_facechapter*chapter*]"{"style":"Thought"}".
    
    Line 67: cum_on_face:"[cum_on_facechapter*chapter*]"{"style":"Thought"}
    
    
    
    Syntax - Major: Wrong format for numeric value (0) of attribute ("resistancecount") for initial_settings on line 72.
    
    SDT will ignore numeric values placed in strings.
    
    Line 72: initial_settings:{"resistancecount":"0"}
    
    
    
    Once you've fixed these issues, try letting me look your dialogue over again. Maybe I'll find something new.

    There are two main mistakes in your dialogue:
    1°) Variables
    Put the "initial_settings" line just under the "dialogue_name" line.
    You have to declare integer variables without quotes.
    You forgot to initialize the "chapter" variable to 0 as well.

    2°) Substitutions and spacing
    DialogueChecker verifies that you don't have white space in the wrong places, such as the beginning or end of a sentence, or more than one subsequent space.
    Also, when using substitutions (YOU/ME/YOUR/MY), you always have to account for the possibility that it isn't set (which is what the checker does).
    So in your case, just replace " *ME*" with "* ME*" and " *YOU*" with "* YOU*" so if those variables aren't set, there won't be too much white spaces.
    Finally the line "devotion5" has a white space at the beginning of the sentence.

    And voilà, don't forget to mention that your dialogue uses the DialogueActions mod, through the use of DEEPTHROAT - trigger.

    Fixed version here:
     

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