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Dialogue Edits

Discussion in 'Dialogue' started by greenhell666, Feb 15, 2012.

  1. greenhell666

    greenhell666 Potential Patron

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    I 'm working on some dialogue edits here from the forum;
    the first it shows of a forced girl in a very angry mood that eventually shows some signs of begging and breaking up.
    the second is an incest mother-son dialogue edited from some other 2 files I found in the forum, but I don't have the original files anymore

    I've tried to put some actions tags into it, but it used to break the dialogue pane, maybe some of them are bugged, I don't know.

    References:

    http://superdeepthroat.ryonani.com/index.php?topic=1396.0
    http://superdeepthroat.ryonani.com/index.php?topic=1864.0

    I cut some lines, others I made more realistic and less 'porny' ... I also reduced the number of lines to a pattern (5,10 or15)

    If anyone know how to insert action commands (SHOCK, SWALLOW, WINCE) without bugging the dialogue pane, let me know.
     

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  2. mike

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    Re: Forced Girl

    Not to disminish your work but this type of dialogue has already been covered by Curious (http://superdeepthroat.ryonani.com/index.php?topic=1396.0) and me (http://superdeepthroat.ryonani.com/index.php?topic=1864.0).

    You will notice your lines are very similar to ours and don't bring anything new. Maybe you should try a more original subject next time.
     
  3. greenhell666

    greenhell666 Potential Patron

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    Re: Forced Girl

    I know that and I'm not trying to be original, basically what I did was -cut cheesy lines and -edit others.

    Also some of the lines made the dialog less generic, and I tried to make the dialog fit any 'forced girl' character.

    Another thing, some 'situations' had less than 5 different lines, making the dialog repetitive,
    so I joined lines from the sources or created some new lines, the final result is that most of the cases
    now have 10 or more lines.

    Right now I'm working on some incest dialogs I found here in the forum and doing the same editing,
    the only difference is that some lines a too long and require more editing.

    Also I plan on doing variations of this dialogue, one where the girl is still resisting and another after she is 'broken' ;D

    Sorry if I didn't directly referenced your works, I didn't had time to search the forum posts and thanks for your works.
     
  4. mike

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    Re: Forced Girl

    Well, there's a difference between being inspired by others work, for which a reference is expected, and taking others lines to make it sound like new stuff.

    The least you could have done is ask the authors of those dialogues and I don't say that just for me. For your future work I'd recommend you to ask for permission first, unless the author explicitly allowed free modifications. And if you get no answer well you should consider it as a no.

    You are very welcome to suggest improvements to existing dialogues though and authors will gladly hear you and maybe implement those suggestions.