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Deepthroat loving GF

Discussion in 'Dialogue' started by recreation, Nov 2, 2011.

  1. recreation

    recreation Potential Patron

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    err... hello? sommeone home? *knock knock* o.O
    i'm the new guy and just wanted to say hello and give you a small present :3

    this is just a small dialogue with a girlfriend who loves to deepthroat and to please you. she isnt either nympho or submissive, she is just a nice ...girlfriend :)
    i hope my school & internet-english isnt too rusty for you, just tell me if something is bad translated.


    edit: thx for the advice Scyth, attached your version ;)
     

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  2. Scyth118

    Scyth118 Casual Client

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    For someone concerned about bad English, it hardly had any mistakes at all. Just don't forget that "I" is capitalized when alone and in "I'm" and "I'll" and etc.
    Only needed to fix two lines, attached is the file after I changed a few things. Only line that I wasn't sure about is the first "vigorous" line, so let me know if I took it the wrong way.

    Great work on this.

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