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Discussion in 'Dialogue' started by cookiemonste, May 15, 2013.

  1. cookiemonste

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    Hello folks,
    I will post some dialogues from time to time here.
    I don't like the forcefull dialogues, I'm only doing the "soft" ones.
    That means there is no forcing and both pesons are enjoying it.

    cookie 8)

    Policewoman sucking tourist
    Rules: You are a tourist from Germany, but you can replace it with another european country. A big breastet police woman pulls you over because you have overcrossed the speed limit.
    Put her mood on neutral und her hands on her knees, the Dialogoue will change it.



    Here you can find the hair I used http://www.sdtmods.com/index.php?topic=132.msg785#msg785 (It's Farah)


    Stewardess sucking passenger
    You are at a long distance flight and you are afraid of flying.
    She offers you a stress relief, she is not a slut but she gets very horny during the deepthroat.
    You beter not cum on her face or blouse


    MILF seduceing neighbour
    Story: You are a married family father with a very hot single milf as neighbour. One day your wife sends you to her to get some sugar. As she opens the door you realize she's barely dressed because she was taking a nap.
    Rules: Give both Characters a Name, and dress her barely. A T-shirt and a Thong or a Tank Top with some Briefs. Set her mod to neutral.
    Modified the dialogue a bit so it suports all kind of clothings.


    Horny girl sucking horny guy
    A horny girl gives you a blowjob. She likes to suck but not to get used
    This can be used with every character and outfit.


    Teacher rewarding student
    Because you recieved low marks in math and your graduation is in danger a friendly teacher was helping you with private lessons. And because of these lessons you can graduate and improved your grade sginificantly. So she gives you a "reward"
    Give her only a last name, The Miss is allready set. Don't forget to name your player.


    Girlfriend rewards boyfriend

    The classical scematic, girlfriend rewards her boyfriend with a blowjob, set a name for her as for him as well.

    Stay tuned.


    edit: deleted the "old" dialogues and uploaded the fixed versions from Pim.
    edit2: also added versions of the dialogues without introloops.
    And I never thought one of my dialogue would get more than 100 downloads, but one reached 2800 before the re-upload of a fixed version.
    Thanks people!
     

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  2. astounded

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    Re: Police women sucking tourist - need help

    If you share your draft and intent with me I'll make an attempt to make it function. Note: I can only assist with the basic dialoge functions. I don't know how do use the new variables.
     
  3. LoboLascivo

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    Re: Police women sucking tourist - need help

    I hope this helps:

    If you want one line triggers another, you have to do this:

    example:

    Code:
    intro:"This is the first intro line"{"next":"intro1"}
    intro1:"This is the second line, triggered after the intro line is displayed"
    Note the syntax. after "next": you put the name (between quotes) of the line you want to trigger. It can be any name, not necessarily intro1.
    I look forward to your dialogue, it sounds arousing.
     
  4. Pim_gd

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    Re: Police women sucking tourist - need help

    EITHER
    Code:
    intro:"This is the first intro line" {"next":"intro1"}
    intro1:"This is the second line, triggered after the intro line is displayed"
    
    OR
    Code:
    intro:"This is the first intro line[intro1]"
    intro1:"This is the second line, triggered after the intro line is displayed"
    
    will do the job.
     
  5. cookiemonste

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    Re: Police women sucking tourist - need help

    So, basicly I just write "next" linename.
    And on and on right?
     
  6. Pim_gd

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    Re: Police women sucking tourist - need help

    Yes.

    Be aware that when something interrupts the dialogue it will stop playing (girl can't talk if her mouth is full for instance).
     
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    Re: Police women sucking tourist - need help

    This is an important point since if you intend to change mood/position from X to Y and on to Z in the duration of a dialog line, and she is interrupted after Y but before Z, she will remain in mood/position Y.
     
  8. cookiemonste

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    Re: Police women sucking tourist - need help

    I will ad the mood to the lines, because it's a "different" situation.
    That's clear, nobody can't talk with a full mouth.
    I will post my work when it's done.

    Thanks for the help mates! you are awesome.

    cookie 8)
     
  9. cookiemonste

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    Re: Police women sucking tourist - need help

    I've completed the intro!
    And sorry I was gone for so long, I was bussy with other things.
    The part which was the most difficult for me is done, the intro, and only because auf you guys :)
    I've also planed some other dialogoues.
    I will upload the first one in some days.

    Thanks again!!! cookie 8)
     
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    Re: Police women sucking tourist - work in progress

    I'm almost done, just some more lines.
    I think I can post the dialogue very soon.
     
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    Re: Police women sucking tourist - work in progress

    Completed the dialogoue.
    If you find any errors or msitakes please contact me.
     
  12. Pim_gd

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    Re: Police women sucking tourist completed, more dialogoues to come.

    That'd be dialogue and mistakes.

    Let's see...
    Code:
    I found 12 issue(s) with your dialogue.
    
    Grammatical error (double sentence ending: ?.) on line 8, col 211
    Line 8: intro4:"I'm sorry M'am. I'm on vacation and brought my car from germany. The Speedmeter is broken. It also displays the Speed in kph . So it's unusual for me to calculate in miles. Could you forget this accident?."{"style":"Him","next":"intro5"}
    
    Grammatical error (double sentence ending: ?.) on line 10, col 17
    Line 10: intro6:"Excuse me?."{"style":"Him","next":"intro7"}
    
    An uneven amount of double quotes was found on line 56. This could indicate a coding error.
    Line 56: restart:"I'm still rock hard M'am. You want to go again?"{"style":"Him","}
    
    Grammatical error (double sentence ending: ?.) on line 60, col 28
    Line 60: wake:"What did just happened?..."
    
    Grammatical error (double sentence ending: !.) on line 63, col 20
    Line 63: wake:"... I need air!."
    
    Grammatical error (double sentence ending: ?.) on line 77, col 26
    Line 77: held:"You like that sweety?."
    
    Grammatical error (double sentence ending: ?.) on line 115, col 45
    Line 115: swallow:"Do you like it when a woman swallows?."
    
    Grammatical error (double sentence ending: ?.) on line 139, col 55
    Line 139: drool:"You like it when you cum's getting on my titties?..."
    
    Usage of colon in dialogue line or erroneous space before dialogue line on line 151, col 36
    Line 151: resistance:"My old teacher was right: the police is your best friend."
    
    An uneven amount of double quotes was found on line 159. This could indicate a coding error.
    Line 159: lick_penis:"Please...do..don't stop. This feels so gooood."!""style":"Him"}
    
    An uneven amount of opening and closing {} was found on line 159. This could indicate a coding error.
    Line 159: lick_penis:"Please...do..don't stop. This feels so gooood."!""style":"Him"}
    
    An uneven amount of double quotes was found on line 160. This could indicate a coding error.
    Line 160: lick_penis:"Hmm... It's pretty wet now you'd like to fuck my jugs with that fat cock?
    
    Fixes:
    Code:
    Germany is a country, capitalized... there's a space with your dots " . ", and the line ends with ?. -> fixed to ?
    Line 8: intro4:"I'm sorry M'am. I'm on vacation and brought my car from Germany. The Speedmeter is broken. It also displays the Speed in kph. So it's unusual for me to calculate in miles. Could you forget this accident?"{"style":"Him","next":"intro5"}
    
    [?.] -> ?
    Line 10: intro6:"Excuse me?"{"style":"Him","next":"intro7"}
    
    Coding error. Removed the ," that was unneeded.
    Line 56: restart:"I'm still rock hard M'am. You want to go again?"{"style":"Him"}
    
    Hmm. Is this valid styling? I'm not sure. If it is, I'll have to add that to the filter so it allows this.
    Line 60: wake:"What did just happened?..."
    
    [!.] -> !
    Line 63: wake:"... I need air!"
    
    [?.] -> ?
    Line 77: held:"You like that sweety?"
    
    [?.] -> ?
    Line 115: swallow:"Do you like it when a woman swallows?"
    
    "you cum" -> "your cum". Beyond that, here's the [?...] again and I'm not sure whether this is actually bad.
    Line 139: drool:"You like it when you cum's getting on my titties?..."
    
    Colons are treated as a special character. Replaced with %3A.
    Line 151: resistance:"My old teacher was right%3A the police is your best friend."
    
    Coding error, it seems. Replaced [."!""style"] with [!"{"style"]
    Line 159: lick_penis:"Please...do..don't stop. This feels so gooood!"{"style":"Him"}
    
    You missed a double quote at the end of this line. Added it.
    Line 160: lick_penis:"Hmm... It's pretty wet now you'd like to fuck my jugs with that fat cock?"
    
    Thanks for the dialogue, it seems I need to add [ . ] to the checker. And it got me wondering whether [?...] is really a mistake - If I had to fix it I'd turn it into [? ...] but that doesn't look any better.

    I checked the rest via a spellchecker.
    Code:
    Line 5: intro1:"Damn that woman is so hot. Shite! I've gotten a boner."{"style":"Thought","next":"intro2"}
    "Shite" -> Shit
    Fixed line 5: intro1:"Damn that woman is so hot. Shit! I've gotten a boner."{"style":"Thought","next":"intro2"}
    
    Line 7: intro3:"You overcrossed the speedlimit sir. You have to pay 500 Dollars."{"next":"intro4"}
    "Overcrossed"... I'm not sure whether that's English.
    "speedlimit" -> speed limit
    Fixed line 7: intro3:"You overcrossed the speed limit sir. You have to pay 500 Dollars."{"next":"intro4"}
    
    Line 9: intro5:"I'm looking at that bulge in you pants for some time now. I heard stories about german dicks. If they are true I will let you go."{"next":"intro6"}
    "german" -> German
    "you pants" -> "your pants"
    Fixed line 9: intro5:"I'm looking at that bulge in your pants for some time now. I heard stories about German dicks. If they are true I will let you go."{"next":"intro6"}
    
    Line 11: intro7:"Let's see if the storries are true, let me have a look... (unzip pants) Oh my god![SHOCK] It's huge. [ARMS_HIS_LEGS]This is going to be a challenge for me."{"next":"intro8"}
    "storries" -> stories
    Fixed line 11: intro7:"Let's see if the stories are true, let me have a look... (unzip pants) Oh my god![SHOCK] It's huge. [ARMS_HIS_LEGS]This is going to be a challenge for me."{"next":"intro8"}
    
    Line 14: general:"You know my duty is almost over for today, why don't you vist me in my flat so you can fuck that law obeying pussy"
    "vist" -> visit
    Fixed line 14: general:"You know my duty is almost over for today, why don't you visit me in my flat so you can fuck that law obeying pussy"
    
    Line 17: general:"You want me to bend ofer the trunk of my car so you can fuck my pussy?"
    "ofer" -> over
    Fixed line 17: general:"You want me to bend over the trunk of my car so you can fuck my pussy?"
    
    Line 21: general:"Today's my luck day."{"style":"Him"}
    "my luck day" -> my lucky day
    Fixed line 21: general:"Today's my lucky day."{"style":"Him"}
    
    Line 35: first_throat:"Do you like to see how your cock is disapering into my mouth?"
    "disapering" -> disappearing
    Fixed line 35: first_throat:"Do you like to see how your cock is disappearing into my mouth?"
    
    Line 40: first_throat:"Oh shite! that's awesome."{"style":"Him"}
    "shite" -> shit
    and start new sentences with a capital.
    Fixed line 40: first_throat:"Oh shit! That's awesome."{"style":"Him"}
    
    Line 45: first_dt:"This is so satisfiying, It's making me horny."
    "satisfiying" -> satisfying
    and don't use caps after comma
    Fixed line 45: first_dt:"This is so satisfying, it's making me horny."
    
    Line 51: restart:"I think I just came, Let's go again."
    Don't use a capital after a comma
    Fixed line 51: restart:"I think I just came, let's go again."
    
    Line 52: restart:"You're still hard, You germans got stamina. I like it."
    Same here, and capitalize germans
    Fixed line 52: restart:"You're still hard, you Germans got stamina. I like it."
    
    Line 61: wake:"Oh... Seems like I underastimated your cock."
    underestimated
    Fixed line 61: wake:"Oh... Seems like I underestimated your cock."
    
    Line 65: wake:"I need to be more carefull."
    careful
    Fixed line 65: wake:"I need to be more careful."
    
    Line 66: vigorous:"Seems like I'm not the only one whos enjoying it."
    who is
    Fixed line 66: vigorous:"Seems like I'm not the only one who is enjoying it."
    
    
    Line 81: cough:"*cough*"
    Line 82: cough:"*splutter*"
    Line 83: pre_cum:"*licks lips* Are you getting close, baby? Give your mommy all of that hot cum!"
    * is a special character. Use %2A instead.
    Fixed Line 81: cough:"%2Acough%2A"
    Fixed Line 82: cough:"%2Asplutter%2A"
    Fixed Line 83: pre_cum:"%2Alicks lips%2A Are you getting close, baby? Give your mommy all of that hot cum!"
    
    Line 85: pre_cum:"So the stories about the size of german cocks are true. Let's see how much you can cum."
    Capital G for german
    Fixed line 85: pre_cum:"So the stories about the size of German cocks are true. Let's see how much you can cum."
    
    87: pre_cum:"Please, shoot it al over my face."
    all
    fixed 87: pre_cum:"Please, shoot it all over my face."
    
    89: pre_cum:"Your cock is throbing, just a little more."
    throbbing
    fixed 89: pre_cum:"Your cock is throbbing, just a little more."
    
    92: pre_cum:"I will get every frop out of your bollocks. Believe me sweetheart."
    drop
    fixed 92: pre_cum:"I will get every drop out of your bollocks. Believe me sweetheart."
    
    93: pre_cum:"I.. I'm about to cum Ma'm! Ah! Shite! I'm cumming!"{"style":"Him"}
    Shit
    fixed 93: pre_cum:"I.. I'm about to cum Ma'm! Ah! Shit! I'm cumming!"{"style":"Him"}
    
    94: cum_on_face:"My female colleagues would not belive me if I tell them how much jizz you've shot all over my face, could you take a picture of me?"
    believe
    fixed 94: cum_on_face:"My female colleagues would not believe me if I tell them how much jizz you've shot all over my face, could you take a picture of me?"
    
    96: cum_on_face:"I love the feeling of cum on my face. I'ts so satisfying."
    It's
    fixed 96: cum_on_face:"I love the feeling of cum on my face. It's so satisfying."
    
    98: cum_on_face:"When was the las time you jerked of? It's so much."
    last
    fixed 98: cum_on_face:"When was the last time you jerked of? It's so much."
    
    99: cum_on_face:"I think I should save some of your cum, because the chances to see us each other again are very little."
    "to see us each other again are very little" -> "for us to see each other again are very small"
    fixed 99: cum_on_face:"I think I should save some of your cum, because the chances for us to see each other again are very small."
    
    102: cum_on_face:"Oh, I'm so sorry, I could not control my self!"{"style":"Him"}
    myself 
    fixed 102: cum_on_face:"Oh, I'm so sorry, I could not control myself!"{"style":"Him"}
    
    104: cum_in_mouth:"That was an pressive load, I never had so much cum in my little slutty mouth before ."
    space at end,
    impressive
    fixed 104: cum_in_mouth:"That was an impressive load, I never had so much cum in my little slutty mouth before."
    
    109: cum_in_mouth:"This was the first time ever that my mouth was completly full with cum. You got more?"
    completely
    fixed 109: cum_in_mouth:"This was the first time ever that my mouth was completely full with cum. You got more?"
    
    111: cum_in_mouth:"Do you have a girlfriend? No? Then... I will visit you in germany from time to time if you like."
    Germany
    fixed 111: cum_in_mouth:"Do you have a girlfriend? No? Then... I will visit you in Germany from time to time if you like."
    
    
    113: cum_in_mouth:"I think I'm getting addicted to you cum."
    your cum
    fixed 113: cum_in_mouth:"I think I'm getting addicted to your cum."
    
    114: swallow:"It's like a good whiskey, it goes down like oil.Hmmmm."
    add space for new sentence
    fixed 114: swallow:"It's like a good whiskey, it goes down like oil. Hmmmm."
    
    118: swallow:"If you think that was enough are you wrong."
    "enough are you wrong" -> "enough, you are wrong"
    fixed 118: swallow:"If you think that was enough, you are wrong."
    
    120: swallow:"I love it when cun is extra thick and sticky."
    cum
    fixed 120: swallow:"I love it when cun is extra thick and sticky."
    
    127: cum_in_throat:"To much."[DROOL]
    Trigger out of line.
    Too
    fixed 127: cum_in_throat:"Too much.[DROOL]"
    
    144: drool:"Luckily I have another shirt in my car, I can't get back to the other like this."
    others
    fixed 144: drool:"Luckily I have another shirt in my car, I can't get back to the others like this."
    
    148: resistance:"Relax my german friend, I'll take care of you."
    German
    fixed 148: resistance:"Relax my German friend, I'll take care of you."
    
    152: resistance:"I need some time, your cock is bigger as anything I've suckes so far."
    sucked
    than anything
    fixed 152: resistance:"I need some time, your cock is bigger than anything I've sucked so far."
    
    154: resistance:"Gimme that big fat cock.Mmmmmm."
    space new sentence
    fixed 154: resistance:"Gimme that big fat cock. Mmmmmm."
    
    155: resistance:"Shite! Your mouth is so hot an wet, I think my cock is melting!"
    Style: HIM
    Shit
    and
    fixed 155: resistance:"Shit! Your mouth is so hot and wet, I think my cock is melting!"{"style":"Him"}
    
    161: lick_balls:"I will get every drop of cum out of yout bollocks."
    your
    fixed 161: lick_balls:"I will get every drop of cum out of your bollocks."
    
    162: lick_balls:"You got some big balls to play with.Mmmmm..."
    space new line
    fixed 162: lick_balls:"You got some big balls to play with. Mmmmm..."
    
    163: lick_balls:"I can bearly fit them in my mouth, they are huge."
    barely
    fixed 163: lick_balls:"I can barely fit them in my mouth, they are huge."
    
    Other things I found:
    Code:
    Missing a sentence ending (?, ., !)
    Line 13: general:"What an amazing cock. I'm getting wet"
    Line 14: general:"You know my duty is almost over for today, why don't you vist me in my flat so you can fuck that law obeying pussy"
    Line 20: general:"I love every inch of your cock. Oh I'm sorry, I mean every centimeter "
    Line 59: restart:"Damn.. That was nice, but I think there is some jizz left in your bollocks"
    Line 62: wake:"That's new for me"
    Line 76: held:"I almost passed out"
    Line 107: cum_in_mouth:"If you like, I got more of it for you M'am"{"style":"Him"}
    Line 130: cum_in_throat:"Please... give me more"
    Line 149: resistance:"I can take it deeper, I only need some time"
    
    "tickeling" is not english but I don't know what you're trying to say exactly.
    Line 42: first_dt:"My throat is tickeling."
    

    I can see you have some issues with english.
    Next time, consider using a spellchecker when you're done. It will pick up most spelling errors.

    And uh...
    that's some pretty hot lines in there.
    I was like "daaaamn that's hot" whilst looking for typo's and such. And then the next set of lines came up and I was like "daaaaaaaaaaamn that's hot".

    You say you're going to make other dialogues - if you want me to check those like I checked this one, just tell me.
     
  13. cookiemonste

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    Re: Police women sucking tourist completed, more dialogoues to come.

    Thank's for the help mate,
    ussually I don't have any problems with grammar or spelling.
    My Laptop has a american keyboard which is switched to a german layout.
    I think I should switch it to it standart layout when writing in in english.
    But I will fix that.

    PS: I wanted to say tickels. Not tickeling.

    Now that the school is almost over ( just got my grades, succes.) and nobody is giving a fuck if you are there or not I'm goign to have lots of time.

    I'm deeply ashamed of my dialogue, I'm half english ussualy I don't have any problems.

    cookie :'(
     
  14. Pim_gd

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    Re: Police women sucking tourist completed, more dialogoues to come.

    There's no need to feel ashamed.
    The lines you wrote are, in my opinion, really hot.

    Things like
    swallow:"It's like a good whiskey, it goes down like oil. Hmmmm."

    I mean - how does one even come up with that?! To me, it's brilliant.
    Besides, fixing spelling or grammar is a lot easier than trying to make a boring dialogue more lively.
     
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    Re: Police women sucking tourist completed, more dialogoues to come.

    The cause for these many errors is my writestyle - sitting in my bed, listening to Кино. So my attention is not so present.
    I will change that. And I've corrected most of the errors now - I think i did.
     
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    Re: Police women sucking tourist completed, more dialogoues to come.

    It's something we say in Germany when you're going to swallow something tasting really good ^^

    "Das geht runter wie Öl" can be used with food, drink or whatever ;)
     
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    Re: Police women sucking tourist completed, more dialogoues to come.

    Exactly.
     
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    Re: Police women sucking tourist completed, more dialogoues to come.

    If anyone is interessted in a Char code, just ask.
    That's the dialogue I've planed for now. I've made a list and it#s pretty long. The most interessting for me now:
    A Stewardess is calming a scared passenger down, with ther special ability ::)
    By the way: a fitting background is avaiable here: http://www.sdtmods.com/index.php?topic=2716.msg31706#msg31706
     
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    I am interested in your char code.
     
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    Re: Police women sucking tourist - work in progress

    I'm not seeing a .txt file