Cheating/Cuckold Dialogue (1 Viewer)

[louise]

Just a cheating/cuckold dialogue.
Here's a screen http://picpaste.com/pics/screenshot0003.1378520605.png
Pretty masochistic lines, toilet play etc
Feedback would be nice.
Enjoy being cheated on/fucking a cheating whore!

Edit: Fixed a few things and improved a bit.

 

[AaRL]

Your dialogue doesn't contain an intro. Try adding one to set the table (mood and flow) for the rest of the dialogue.
Add triggers such as [BLINK], arm movements and mood changes. They will liven up your dialogue.
You might want to create a character code to further enhance the dialogue.

Check out other dialogues around the forums and check the sticked guide up top for more tips.